Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is believed that, sharing information of scientific research, business and the academic world is banificial while other believe that it should not be opend to everyone as it may lose its value. Though both sides have some benefits and drawbacks I belive, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Sharing important research on science, business and academic sector will allow the general people to know more about the world. It will help them to upgrade their perspective. For example, if a student want some valuable information for his academic purpose he wil find it easily in the website which will help him streangthen his view. Furthermore, sharing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“the advantages outweigh the disadvantages”—and begin to explain how sharing research can help the public and students. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it does not explain why some information may be too valuable or sensitive to share, and the opposing view is only mentioned in the opening. The example about a student finding information online is relevant but remains general and is not developed into a clear explanation. The response also ends mid-sentence at “Furthermore, sharing,” so the discussion and conclusion are missing. The required minimum of 250 words is not met. To improve, discuss both views, support each with a specific example, and complete your argument with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph gives your position, followed by a paragraph about the benefits of sharing. The example beginning “For example” also signals a supporting point. However, the overall progression is incomplete because the response stops mid-sentence, with no developed discussion of the other view or concluding paragraph. The linking words “Though,” “For example,” and “Furthermore” are used, but “Furthermore” introduces no completed idea, and the relationship between the two sides is not established. Develop a clear sequence—introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion—and ensure each paragraph has a complete central idea supported by explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “academic sector,” “valuable information,” and “perspective,” which helps communicate the general subject. The range is nevertheless limited, and several spelling errors make the writing less clear, such as “banificial,” “opend,” “belive,” “streangthen,” and “wil.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural: “sharing information of scientific research” and “upgrade their perspective” do not express the ideas as naturally as “sharing scientific findings” and “broaden their understanding.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for both sides of the debate, such as confidentiality, intellectual property, public access, and innovation, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and an attempt at a more complex sentence, such as “Though both sides have some benefits and drawbacks I believe…,” as well as a conditional example beginning “if a student…”. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, the opening has an unnecessary comma after “believed,” while “other believe” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “if a student want,” the verb should agree with the singular subject, and the conditional sentence shifts awkwardly between “want” and “will find.” The final “Furthermore” sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate agreement, articles, punctuation, and complete conditional structures, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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