Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research,such as business and the academic world. While the other hand,many people contradict the statement, they belive that some information is too important or too valuable to shared freely.

From the my point of view, it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research and other activity you are doing such as business and the Academic world. Behind the reason why i am agree with this statement, it is good to share the informtion. First advantage are you can got more information, when you share the information about your work you have doing. The person has also give the information about your work, that information also helpfull in your work.When you share the information anyone, you also know about the more inforamtion.

While the other hand, many people has contradicts the statement, that belive some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely, Because these people have belive, that share the information to anyone, it is not good, From the my point of view, they have many disadvantage not shared freely. First when you are died, the information that you know only, they are unusrfull for the other peoples, And the inforamtion you know about the bussiness, My opinion, it is good to share the information with the other they have helpfull in your work.

In colusion, Please share the inforamtion with someone it is good habit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear preference for sharing information, and you refer to both the benefits of sharing and the concern that valuable information should not be freely available. However, the discussion of the opposing view is not really explained: the claim that information may be too important or valuable is repeated, but no reason or example is developed. Your own argument is also difficult to follow, particularly the point about information being useless after someone dies. The response contains 199 words, so it is 51 words below the required minimum; this limits how fully you can address both views and support your opinion. Develop each side with a clear reason and a relevant example, then explain your position more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, paragraphs presenting your view and the opposing view, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several ideas are repeated rather than connected or explained. For example, “share the information” recurs without clarifying how the information helps, while “While the other hand” is used awkwardly to introduce the opposing view. The conclusion, “Please share the information with someone,” does not clearly summarise the discussion. Use clear topic sentences, organise one main idea per paragraph, and connect each reason to an explanation or example. More accurate transitions and clearer references would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “academic world,” “valuable,” and “advantage,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “information” and “share.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “belive,” “inforamtion,” “unusrfull,” and “contradicts the statement,” which make parts of the message less clear or natural. Some expressions, including “the person has also give the information about your work,” do not communicate the intended meaning precisely. Build a small set of accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express the ideas with greater clarity and variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can understand the broad position. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. Examples include “it is good to shared freely,” “First advantage are,” and “you can got more information,” where verb forms or agreement are incorrect. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “From the my point of view” and “The person has also give the information.” Several sentences run together or use punctuation inappropriately, as in “When you share the information anyone, you also know about the more inforamtion.” Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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