Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individual provide creative informatioin without any confusion they always promote for modern innovation, corporate sector and research methodology frequently. Others think that excessive share of data quite harmful and less attentive thats why they are not interested to share their achivement. In my point of view, I argued both of the side for reason a number of people share their knowledge coveniently also oversharing quite hinder for their entier life.

Generally speaking, people always feel very concern about their profession as a result, sharing new experience quite helpful for their productive life. Firstly, many individual face more dificulities but new initiative has bring possitive outcome for future carrer path. Secondly, a sucessful businessman provide business strategy for small entrepreneur also motivated theirs and they gain proper guideline for achiving their goal such as elon mask attend the programe and share his own experience how he could a sucessful businessman and his space x journey also build world largest car companies.

However, excessive motivation and sharing information reduce the value of speech also many people much not about their concern. furthermore, they feel less interest, feeling bored and create negetive emotion which impact fall over the industry. Beside, most of the people think that excessive information always provide unnecessary speech also they think that is weast of time. They do not understand this value as a result at a time they suffer a lot. For instance, motivation speeker fall their interest and successful person do not agree to give interview.

To sum up, i reteirate that a small amount of information bring lots of benifits and more attractions so that many individuals gives full of attention, after that they understand this value and find out all of success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt to discuss both views and give a personal position, particularly in the opening and conclusion. The paragraph about sharing experience offers a relevant point about helping entrepreneurs, and the example of Elon Musk is intended to support it. However, the response only partially addresses the central issue: it focuses at times on motivation and interviews rather than explaining why scientific, business, or academic information should be shared or protected. The argument against sharing is also unclear; claims that sharing causes boredom or “negative emotion” do not explain the risks of valuable information being made public. Your position shifts between supporting both sides and recommending only “a small amount” of information. Develop each view with a clear reason and a relevant example, then state a consistent opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “However,” and “To sum up” help signal the intended progression. However, the links between ideas are often unclear, and some sentences do not build logically on the previous point. For example, the move from excessive sharing to people feeling bored, then to successful people refusing interviews, leaves the relationship between these claims unexplained. The conclusion also introduces “a small amount of information” without clearly resolving the earlier discussion. Use each paragraph to develop one main argument, connect examples directly to that argument, and make references such as “this value” more specific.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “innovation,” “corporate sector,” “business strategy,” and “entrepreneur,” and you try to express abstract ideas about the effects of sharing information. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “information,” “people,” and “share,” while several word choices or combinations make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “excessive motivation,” “reduce the value of speech,” and “fall their interest” do not clearly express the intended ideas. Spelling errors, including “achivement,” “dificulities,” and “sucessful,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise topic vocabulary for benefits and risks, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “as a result,” “because,” and “which.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “many individual face” has a number-agreement problem, while “a sucessful businessman provide” also needs a plural subject or a singular verb form. In “a small amount of information bring,” the verb does not agree with the subject. Some sentences combine several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns first, then add one subordinate clause at a time and check punctuation between complete ideas.

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