Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the argument, some people believe sharing information about business and other activities is a good thinking. But on the other hand some people believe, It is not esential to realised people about these information thats are very useful for your future.Because of these reasons in this essay both's are very importent So, I describe both points and than I give my answer.

In first statement, people believe sharing your openion and informations is very useful for those people who start their business or joined a new job. They give him their experieance for their help. The biggest Positive point of this decision is that, children devloped their business easily. They risied in the world as a successful person. Give help needy people is a good habit, if you help poor people when your childrens will see you they also follow your foot steps.This type of think is mostly bring in polity persons.

On the other hand, some people strongly believe that share importent information to every one is not true. Its main reason is they think that some people meat you just for spending their time. They did not feel this need because every person has different dreems. So, this type of people believe, if you will share your own information they give you many negative aspects.

Overall, I agree with second openion becauce of these reasons. You just waste your time to informed people about importent inoformantion.They give you many disadvantiges if you help those people who did not feel the needs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt both sides of the discussion and state a position in the conclusion: “I agree with second opinion.” However, the response only partially addresses the specific issue of sharing scientific, business and academic information. The first view is mainly explained through helping people start businesses or find jobs, while the opposing view relies on general claims about wasted time and negative consequences. These points are not clearly connected to valuable or sensitive information, and no relevant examples are developed. To strengthen the response, explain concrete benefits such as research findings helping further discoveries, then contrast these with risks such as commercial confidentiality or misuse of sensitive data. Make your opinion clear and support it with a specific reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. This helps the reader identify the broad direction of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several links between ideas are unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from business advice to children succeeding and then to politicians without explaining how these points connect. Phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Overall” provide basic signposting, but other transitions, including “Because of these reasons,” do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it, and add a relevant example before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “sharing information,” “business,” “experience,” and “negative aspects,” so the general subject can be followed. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “openion,” “importent,” “experieance,” and “inoformantion.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “a good thinking,” “children developed their business,” and “share important information to every one.” Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. For instance, distinguish between “share research findings,” “protect confidential information,” and “commercial advantage,” rather than relying on broad references to information and help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic linking structures, including “if” clauses and contrastive openings. Nevertheless, sentence structures are limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur frequently enough to make some ideas hard to follow. For example, “some people believe sharing information … is a good thinking” has an unclear grammatical construction, while “They give him their experience for their help” has unclear pronoun reference and sentence structure. The conditional “if you help poor people when your childrens will see you” is also not formed accurately. Practise building clear simple sentences first, then add controlled subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after “believe,” and punctuation between clauses.

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