Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days scientists are more concernd about the quality of the research rather than the quantity of the research. Many of them believe that sharing as much as informaion with the institutions and business is beneficial. While other say that specific information should not be shared publicly. I will discuss the both points and come up with my ouwn judgment.

Firstly, research is done for the advancement in technolgy and problem solving. When handsome amount of information is shared with the institutions and business through high quality of research. It will help people adress more problems and propose the solutions to these problem in the world, also it will help in technological advancement. For exmaple, if we want to tackle the impacts of climate change then we need to do more and more research. That reseach is then shared with the academic world and start ups they will impliment that information practically into the world to mitigate increasing climate change effects to the environment.Sharing more and more information is not bad unless it is being shared with honest people.

Secondly, scientists sometimes consider not to share their research with the public. Because there are chances that information can be used for negative activities. They keep the information to themselves or only share with some institutions secretly. For example, scientists do research on uranium to enrich it to be used for various purposes like fuel for nuclear power plants for electricity generation. Research information like these cannot be shared with public institutions as it can be used for making military grade uranium which is used to make atomic bombs. This kind of sharing of information can cause distruction on a large scale.

To summarise, wether people should share research information to public institutions or businesses or not. I think it totally depends on the research information that it can be shared or not or it can be used in criminal activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear, relevant position: sharing can be beneficial, but whether information should be released depends on its potential use. The climate-change example supports the benefits of research sharing, while the uranium example explains why some findings may be sensitive. This meets the task, although the two sides are not developed equally. The first argument is broad, and the claim that sharing is safe “unless it is being shared with honest people” is not fully explained. Your conclusion repeats your conditional position but could state more precisely how decisions about access should be made. Develop the reasoning behind each example and make the final judgement more decisive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “To summarise” help readers follow the discussion. However, some connections are mechanical, and a few sentences do not link ideas smoothly. For instance, “When handsome amount of information is shared…” is followed by “It will help…” in a way that makes the relationship between the opening clause and the main point unclear. The final paragraph begins with a sentence fragment-like question structure before giving your opinion. Improve progression by connecting causes and results within complete sentences, and use clearer referencing so that phrases such as “these problems” and “this kind of sharing” have precise antecedents.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “technological advancement,” “climate change,” “enrich,” and “military grade uranium,” which helps explain the examples. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, but several word-choice and spelling problems reduce precision: “handsome amount” is not a natural collocation, “adress” and “distruction” are misspelled, and “honest people” does not clearly express the idea of responsible or trustworthy users. Some wording is repetitive, particularly “more and more research” and “sharing…information.” Choose precise collocations and proofread spelling, while varying repeated terms. This would make your meaning more exact and demonstrate more controlled use of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex forms, including conditional language (“if we want to tackle…”) and a contrast introduced by “While.” Meaning is generally understandable, but some sentence structures and punctuation are inaccurate. “While other say that…” is an incomplete contrast clause, and “When…is shared… It will help…” separates a dependent clause from its main clause. The sentence beginning “For example, if we want…” also shifts into “they will implement” without a clear grammatical link between the research and the people using it. The conclusion’s opening, “To summarise, whether people should share… or not,” is likewise incomplete. Practise joining dependent clauses to complete main clauses and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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