Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the present era, shear as much information as possible in scientific research, bussiness and the academic world has become a widely discussed issue around the would. While some people believe that information is too important or too valuable to be sheard freely has several asvantages, others argue that it can also have negative effects. This essay will discuss both views before explaining my opinion.

To begin with, there are several reasons why it is good too shear as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world can be beneficial. One important advantage is that on the study perpuse shear as a other person information it is fully benefitied on the people and all over the people. This is because there are many advantage with student. As a result, good result with there friend and our students it is benefited our students. For example, a students shared there important document or information, so there are fully benefited with there all classes students with our school/ college results. Therefore, it is clear that scientific research, business and the academic world can have a positive impact on individuals and society.

On the other hand information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely can also have disadvantages. This main concern is that my business and academic note or secreate information shear with other so you are copy my imformation. This may happen because they are apply my information so my secound copyt totally social vairal and dropped me. Conseaquently, in the market or academic life all of people apply there work in my inforamtion . For instance, my business drop in the market because all of people apply there. However, I believe that these peoblems can be reduces if suitable steps are taken.

In conclusion, shear as much information as possible in acientific reasearch has both positive negative aspects. Although there are some disadvantages, i believe that the benefits of information is too sheard others freely are greater, provided that it is used managed peoperly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You introduce both views and state a preference for sharing information, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the benefits paragraph focuses mainly on students sharing documents, rather than explaining how openness helps scientific research or business. The opposing view is also difficult to follow; the point about others copying business or academic work is relevant, but its consequences are not clearly explained. Your conclusion repeats your preference but does not clarify when information should remain protected. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific, explained example, and make your position consistent throughout. The 41 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the reported length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within the body paragraphs is uneven. In the first, the ideas about students, friends, and school results repeat without a clear sequence; in the second, the link between copying information and a business losing its market position is hard to trace. Some references, including “they” and “there,” do not clearly identify who is meant. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain its cause or consequence and connect the example directly to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “negative effects,” “market,” and “shared,” and you use some topic-related terms such as “business” and “academic.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and word-form errors make parts difficult to understand: “shear” for “share,” “secreate,” “social vairal,” and “dropped me.” Phrases such as “fully benefitied on the people” and “good result with there friend” are not natural collocations, so the intended meaning is unclear. Build a bank of accurate expressions for both sides of the issue, such as “protect intellectual property” and “accelerate scientific progress,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use a few attempts at complex structures, including “While some people believe…” and “This may happen because…,” as well as simple sentences and a concluding conditional phrase. However, the sentence patterns are limited, and many attempts at longer sentences are faulty or incomplete. For example, “While some people believe that information … has several advantages, others argue…” does not form a clear grammatical contrast, while “This main concern is that my business and academic note…” has an unclear structure. There are also problems with agreement, articles, and pronouns, as in “a students” and “all of people.” Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each clause has a complete and logically connected meaning.

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