Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is generally belived that; By sharing good information in scientific research, business and the academic world it build relationship between a person more strong for each. In this essay i will explain both my views and the own opinion.

The foremost argument to justify my point is that people believe that by share good information as possible in research, business and the academic world. My view on this statement was good because by sharing much information another person can be inspired in scientific research, business and the academic world. For example, people know much thing about the topic such as, gaining more ideas through your information on business, in academic worls as well as they share information helped in the scientific research also. Similarly by sharing information with each other it make's their relationship more stronge and they will be confortabl with each other.

Futhermore, Other people believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. In my opinion, By sharing freely too valuable or too important information people can take stand by there self through some informtion that you provide them such as, if they suffer for family they will be able to take stand by themself with their family as well as relatives or neighbours. Although; In this time you can shared too valuable information freely on diffrent platfroms such as, facebook, tittok, instagram and other many platfroms.

In conclusion, I believe that by sharing good information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world as well as some information that are too valuable or important to be shared freely make people more confident and take stand for by themself for their own goods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give an opinion, but the response only minimally develops the task. The first view is linked to inspiration and stronger relationships, while the second is discussed mainly through personal support and social-media platforms; neither section explains clearly why research, business, or academic information might be valuable or need protection. The conclusion repeats the general claim rather than resolving the contrast between open sharing and restricted access. The response is also 5 words below the 250-word minimum; the 38 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, explain each side with a relevant, specific example and state a clear, consistent position on when information should be shared or protected.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “For example,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from inspiration to relationships without explaining the connection, and the second shifts from family support to social-media platforms. Some linking phrases are used mechanically or do not express a clear relationship, as in “Although; In this time.” Repeated references to sharing information also make the argument feel circular. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then develop it with an explanation and a directly relevant example; use linking words only where their logical function is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “valuable,” “inspired,” and “relationship,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “share good information,” “take stand by there self,” and “for their own goods.” Repetition of “information,” “sharing,” and “important” also restricts flexibility. Spelling errors, including “belived,” “stronge,” and “diffrent,” further reduce accuracy. Build a more precise topic vocabulary for openness, confidentiality, research findings and commercial knowledge, and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur repeatedly. For example, “it build relationship” needs a correctly formed verb and plural noun, while “by share good information” requires a gerund after “by.” In “it make's their relationship more stronge,” the subject–verb agreement and sentence form are faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, as in “It is generally belived that;” and “Although;”. Practise building accurate sentences with subordinate clauses and gerund patterns, then check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly matched verb. Greater control would make the argument easier to follow.

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