Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Whether to share useful information or not is widely debated issue today. Some people think that beneficial information about scientific research and business should be shrared freely while others argue against it. I think that we should promote free sharing of information for the well-being of humanity as it benfits everyone ultimately.

On the one hand, many proponents of the view of hiding useful information think that it bring financial benfits to them. There are many examples where people hide useful information for financial purposes. For example China hide the secret of silk manufacturing for centuries. Likewise, cultivation and source of cinnamon were kept secret by many Asian and Arab traders for many years. This approach provided them economical benefits due to their long term monopoly over the product sale and earning great profit.

On the other hand, many people think that valuable information should be shared to everyone freely. As this will promote more prosperity with improved research and innovation. Such as whole world is benefited by spreading information of quinine as a treatment of Malaria and it helped to control Malaria world wide. This approach finally benefited people from all over the world by trying to eradicate disease causing mosquito all over the world. Futhermore, people sharing small hacks of business promote overall prosperity in society. Moreover, sharing scientific knowledge and research work encourage others to investigate further and help create new inventions. Such as sharing research work of Eienstein lead to many modern inventions today.

In conclusion, I think sharing information has far more benefits than disadvantages. Evolutionary theories confirm now modern homosepiens survived despite many setbacks among 20 different Homo species due to communication and sharing knowledge.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear position: you support sharing information because it benefits humanity. The examples of silk, cinnamon, quinine and scientific research are relevant, and the conclusion returns to your central argument. This meets the task well overall. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for keeping information private is explained mainly through financial gain and historical monopolies, while the benefits of sharing receive several reasons. Some claims also need clearer explanation—for example, the link between sharing quinine information and eradicating disease-carrying mosquitoes is not fully established. To strengthen the response, explain the value of protecting commercially sensitive or dangerous information, then develop each example more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the opposing views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. This gives the essay a coherent arrangement. Some connections, however, feel mechanical or unclear. The paragraph beginning “As this will promote…” is a sentence fragment, and “This approach” does not always identify precisely which idea it refers to. The examples in the sharing paragraph also move quickly from malaria to business tips and then Einstein, with limited transitions explaining how each supports the argument. Use complete topic sentences and clearer links between claims and examples to make the progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “monopoly,” “prosperity,” “innovation,” and “eradicate,” and you attempt less common expressions such as “financial purposes” and “long term monopoly.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, though some are imprecise or unnatural: “economical benefits” would be better expressed as “economic benefits,” and “small hacks of business” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “shrared,” “benfits,” “Futhermore,” and “Eienstein” also reduce accuracy. The meaning is generally recoverable, but more careful proofreading and more natural collocations would improve control. Aim to choose precise terms rather than relying on broad phrases such as “useful information.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while,” “as,” and “despite,” and the main argument is usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening needs an article (“a widely debated issue”), and “it bring” should be “it brings.” In “China hide” and “cultivation and source … were kept,” verb forms and agreement need attention. The sentence “As this will promote more prosperity…” is incomplete, while “sharing scientific knowledge and research work encourage” needs subject–verb agreement (“encourages”). These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but they limit accuracy. Practise checking articles, verb agreement and sentence completeness, especially when beginning a sentence with a dependent clause.

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