Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argu, that the scientific research, business and academic world information should be share as much as possible. Some individuals consider that this is beat way to increases the knowledge of the individuals because share information helps to increase knowledge. However other believe that share the valuable informationa freely is signifantly harful because scientise have lots of information which might be creates majore impact on specifice business. I believe share the information freely, might scare peopel because there are a lot research which is going on the harmfull things.

The key resons behind the share of information are increases trust and knowledge. When scientice and organisations share the information, they gain the trust of people and individuals start consider them trustfull. Futhermore this things increases the knowledge of the individuals. In recent year most of companys shared their information. As a result people started trust on them and invested the money in that company.

One majore reason why share the valuable information freely is not a good thing. The most compant and scientices do their resarch, when they achieve the goal than they have to keep this secrate because if they tell, than compateter might take the advantge of that. Futhermore there are many things which make people scare. During world war no one country had been sharing the information related to technology because every one want to make nuclear boom first.

In conclusion, share the signifant information will make huge impact on the organisation. therefor most of the organisation only share the infoemation which is less important. As a result individuals start trust on them and also theykeep the information unshare

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion: the first body paragraph argues that sharing can build trust and knowledge, while the next explains that competitors may exploit confidential research. The example about countries withholding nuclear technology is relevant, and your conclusion indicates support for sharing less important information while protecting valuable material. However, the position is not fully clear: the opening says sharing freely might “scare people,” which does not clearly express your view, and the conclusion does not directly state when information should be shared. Several points, such as the claim that sharing increases trust, are asserted rather than explained or supported with a specific example. Develop each argument and state your position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “However,” “Furthermore,” and “As a result” help show relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from trust to knowledge and then to company investment without explaining the connections. Some linking is repetitive or awkward, and references such as “this things” and “that” do not always make the intended meaning clear. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the two sides together. Use clearer topic sentences, explain how each example supports its point, and make references more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “valuable information,” “competitor,” and “nuclear” technology, so the main subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, word-form, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “share the valuable informationa freely,” “signifantly harful,” and “keep this secrate.” Phrases such as “trust on them” and “make people scare” are also not natural collocations. Aim to learn topic vocabulary in accurate phrases, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise terms such as “confidential findings” or “commercial advantage” would help express the arguments clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea about competitors taking advantage of disclosed research. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “information should be share” has an incorrect verb form, while “this is beat way to increases” contains problems with the article, adjective, and verb pattern. Subject–verb agreement and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “most of the companys shared their information” and “if they tell, than compateter might take.” Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, especially verb forms after modal verbs, agreement, and clause construction, then build longer sentences from them.

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