Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in my opinion, give an information freely to someone who makes you feel better and valuable in life.whenever i help people, give them an idea or information i feel like i'm in cloud nine ,i feel butterfly in my stomach.in this way people respect you more than before and they depend on you in their dificult situations.i'm greatful as a dentist to make people's smile more beautiful and make them feel confident in themselfes.

however there is some kind of people who don't respect another when they help them because they envy and have cruel on them.if i know someone who dont respect my time my effort i'll never give him a word,because he doesn't deserve it.sometime people who works in the medical field like a doctor or nurse they always give people an information freely without hesitate due to their jobs on the human's life they couldnt always think about money to give an instruction and motivation.by the way some information which is more crucial or important could'nt give freely to everyone.it's in the nature of human if they get things easliy they can easily throw it away or ignore it without knowing how precious it is.so that's why accourding to the information you give , you have to know which is better to give freely or not .as i mentioned before i would probably give people instructions and motivations in my career as a dentist freely but ia can't do filling or root canal treatment freely if i do that it brings my job to the lower level.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You express a personal preference for sharing some information, and the dentist example gives your view a relevant, concrete connection to professional life. However, the response only partially addresses the discussion: it does not clearly explain the broader case for freely sharing information in scientific research, business, or academia, and the reasons for protecting valuable information remain general. The point that people may “throw it away” if they receive things easily needs explanation or an example. Your position also shifts between sharing information to help others and withholding it from people who do not respect you, so the reader is left unsure of your overall principle. Develop both sides in relation to the topic and state a consistent opinion clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: “in my opinion” introduces your view, while “however” signals a contrast, and the final sentence returns to your work as a dentist. These markers help the reader recognise a basic line of thought. However, the response does not have clear paragraphing or a sustained progression through the two views in the question. Several different points—personal generosity, ungrateful people, medical duties, and the value of paid dental treatment—are joined in one long sequence, and links such as “by the way” do not clearly show how the ideas relate. Group the arguments into separate paragraphs, use topic sentences, and connect each example directly to the relevant view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some expressive and topic-related language, including “crucial,” “precious,” “medical field,” and “root canal treatment.” These choices show an effort to discuss value, professional responsibility, and your own experience. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural phrases make parts of the message difficult to follow, such as “have cruel on them,” “give him a word,” and “brings my job to the lower level.” Spelling errors such as “dificult,” “greatful,” and “easliy” are also noticeable. Build a more precise vocabulary for the task—especially terms related to research, intellectual property, confidentiality, and commercial advantage—and check collocations and spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “whenever,” “because,” and “if,” so there is an attempt to go beyond simple statements. However, the range remains limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “whenever i help people, give them an idea or information i feel” lacks a clear grammatical connection between its parts, while “some information … couldn’t give freely” has an unclear subject and verb construction. Errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries recur, as in “there is some kind of people” and the long final section joined with commas. Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use full stops to separate distinct ideas.

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