Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The present era is of information. While some individuals argue it should be shared freely, others believe there should be some restrictions. In my opinion, some knowledge could be misused. Hence, every information should not be shared.
Flow of information helps people from different fields. If the know about the existing evidence, they can use it for their own work or improve the research. A student or a researcher, who does not know about the past studies would not be able to add more to the specific research. Moreover, this creates a risk of reapeating the same arguements. So, giving access to a wide range of information in the field of science, academia and bussiness could contribute to the development. For example, a medical researcher could add to the research of cancer cells by studying the work done in the past and trying new methods after that.
Nevertheless, not everyone wants the betterment of society. There are people, who use information to create conficts or problems for other people. The military information, such as development of arms, or any new formula that would be harmful, if gone to wrong hands could start a war. This would be detrimental for human peace. For example, if a person with bad intentions knows how to make a bomb, then he can kill innocent citizens. This is harmful for society. For these reasons, there should be some boundaries about the infornation which should be shared and which should be kept hidden from the general public.
In conclusion, shared information is necessary for the development of the society but there are some information that should be classified. Information that could be misused should not be shared.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
You address both views and state a clear position: information can support progress, but knowledge that could be misused should be restricted. The examples about cancer research and bomb-making are relevant and help explain the contrast. This meets the task well, while showing some of the fuller development expected at the next level. However, the case for sharing information in business is only briefly included, and the risks of restricting valuable information are not explored. The argument about harmful information could also be more precise: distinguish sensitive military or technical knowledge from research that can safely be shared. Developing these points with a specific explanation or example would make the discussion more balanced and convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for the benefits of sharing, one for the risks, and a conclusion that restates your view. Ideas generally progress logically, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Nevertheless,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. To make the progression more flexible and precise, ensure that each paragraph develops one central point before moving to its example. The transition from the general claim about information to the military example is understandable, but the relationship could be explained more explicitly. Some references, such as “this” in “This is harmful for society,” are broad; naming the specific consequence would make connections between ideas clearer.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “existing evidence,” “development,” “misused,” “classified,” and “detrimental.” These choices communicate the main argument, and some less common terms help establish an appropriately formal tone. However, several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors reduce precision: “Flow of information” is less natural than “the free flow of information,” while “reapeating,” “arguements,” “bussiness,” “conficts,” and “infornation” are misspelled. Phrases such as “every information” and “wrong hands” also need more natural forms. Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common academic collocations so your vocabulary is not only relevant but consistently accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if a person with bad intentions knows how to make a bomb” and a relative clause in “A student or a researcher, who does not know about the past studies…”. Meaning remains clear overall, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “If the know” is missing a subject, “every information” has incorrect determiner and agreement, and “There are some information” should use a plural count noun or an uncountable construction. The sentence beginning “The military information” also needs clearer grammatical framing, and the comma before “who” is unnecessary in the student/researcher sentence. Review articles, countability, and clause punctuation, while continuing to vary sentence structures.
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