Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individuals argue that knownledge is beneficial and they should be share as much as possible so it can be utilized in several areas of scientific research and in educational world while others assume that some bits of information is crucial and worthy which should not be shared freely.I strongly believe that information in modern technology contains a lot of deterimental and beneficial effects. Its hard to suppose how people will contribute in it. so, important and valuable information should not be shared freely.

To begin with, the Considerable amount of information is present on the websites which you can acess freely and consume it for its beneficial effects . It takes ages to prove the thesis and knownledge which is available currently free of cost. Medical researches take decades before they are approved for public health sectors For instant : It took many trials and specfication for researchers to generate the final products of drugs while quacks in current time have free acess to it which they use on patients and create serious health isssues. These consequence usually happen because some crucial and valuable information is acessable by people who try to misuse it.

Moreover, Postgraduates students who are working in resreach departments usually use data which is already available on the digital world to generate data for their assigment this contributes in lack of more research and effect critical thinking individuals. This leads in poor development of reserach papers and students are never qualified enough to bring their own data as they copy the previous publications of reserachers.

In conclusion, I believe the information should not be available freely but it should be present in very limited amount from which people can relate and create more development in academic world. While some valuable and worthy information should cost so only serious consumer can have it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall opinion that valuable information should not be shared freely, and your examples about medical research and students using existing data are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is unbalanced: the view in favour of sharing information is mentioned in the introduction but is not explained or supported in a body paragraph. Your own position is also not fully consistent: you argue against free access, then conclude that information should be available “in very limited amount” and that some should “cost,” without clarifying what should remain accessible or why. Develop both perspectives with specific reasons, then state a precise position and support it with a more fully explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. The main ideas are generally grouped by topic, but progression is uneven: the first body paragraph focuses on misuse of medical information, while the second shifts to students copying research without clearly connecting this to the broader debate about sharing. Some links are awkward or unclear, including “This leads in poor development,” and the conclusion introduces access limits without resolving the earlier argument. Make each paragraph advance one clear point and use more precise references and transitions to show how examples support it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “public health sectors,” “critical thinking” and “digital world,” and this gives the response some range beyond basic everyday language. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow: “knownledge,” “deterimental,” “acess,” “quacks,” and “specfication” are examples. Several combinations are also unnatural, such as “generate data for their assignment” when describing students copying existing work, and “serious consumer” in the conclusion. Choose more precise academic expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, distinguish between researchers producing original data and students reusing published data, rather than relying on broad or unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example the opening sentence and the explanation beginning “It took many trials…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in “some bits of information is crucial” and “they should be share,” while sentence boundaries and punctuation are often faulty, as in “Its hard to suppose how people will contribute in it. so, important…” Articles and plurals are also unreliable, including “the Considerable amount” and “Postgraduates students.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add clauses with correct agreement, articles and punctuation; proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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