Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The map illustrates the structural view in the middle of islip town now and the future plans for improvment of it.
Overall, it is clearly see that the main changes in the future there will be two way roads for the citizens and including bus stand , car park, new housing while removing some shops compare with exicted one.
The main fact is. there will be numerous changes for the strucral view the first thing will bw a extened a way for the people when now it is countrysid and not useful for the town. in future it will a road for the people of the town
On the other hand, there will be a lot more changes in the plan su
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
You identify that the maps compare Islip now with a future plan, and you mention several relevant changes, including a bus facility, car park, new housing and the removal of some shops. However, the response gives only a very limited account of the maps and does not clearly report the main spatial changes. For example, it does not explain the dual-carriageway loop, the pedestrian-only central street, or which existing features remain. The claim about “two way roads for the citizens” is unclear and does not accurately summarise the plan. The response also ends mid-sentence, leaving the comparison incomplete. It is 28 words below the required minimum, which further limits the detail provided. To improve, give a clear overview and describe the key changes by location.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview beginning “Overall,” and linking phrases such as “On the other hand.” These provide a basic sense of structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body does not develop the overview into a clear comparison of the two maps. The sentence beginning “The main fact is” is fragmented, and the final phrase, “there will be a lot more changes in the plan su,” is unfinished. Some connections between ideas are also unclear, particularly in the description of the road and countryside. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main changes, and group details by area so the reader can follow what is replaced, retained or added.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bus stand,” “car park,” “new housing,” “shops” and “countryside,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. There are also attempts to use more formal terms, such as “structural view” and “improvement.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing maps: “structural view” does not clearly mean the town layout, and “two way roads for the citizens” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “islip,” “improvment,” “exicted” and “strucral” are noticeable, while “bus stand” is less suitable than the map label. Build a more precise set of map-description terms and check spelling before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts a range of sentence forms, including a comparison in “while removing some shops” and a longer sentence beginning “Overall.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentences are incomplete or difficult to parse. For instance, “Overall, it is clearly see that…” has an incorrect verb construction, while “The main fact is.” is a sentence fragment. The clause “when now it is countrysid” is not grammatically connected to the surrounding idea, and “in future it will a road” is missing a verb. Punctuation and spacing are also uneven. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use straightforward present and future forms to describe what exists and what is planned.
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