Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the diagram explain the process of development of islip town. for this two pictures are given first in about the previous condition of town and second is about the renovation of land.

overall the main features of present town are shops , main roads, houses, park and school. andaccording to new scheam the main changes are in road directions, parking and bus station.

to begin with old map of town, the land is divided into 4 main things as you see there is a main road both sides of the road covered with shops then track is divided into two routes south of the town, first path leads to the park and second one leads to th school. and in the middel of park and school there is a residential area is located.

on the other hand, the the planned development in center is more organise than first one. because is offers more facilities like ring road, which helpes the residents to connect esily with all sides of lands. there is new things like bus stop, mall, parking area and also new houses which make it more resoanable for better life in town.

to sum up, the new one is more convenient because of its structure and facilities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two maps as showing the town before and after development, and your overview notes changes to roads and the addition of transport and parking facilities. However, the account only partially covers the main changes and includes some inaccurate or unclear details. For example, the existing side roads do not both lead to the school: one leads towards the school, while the other enters the park. The planned layout is also more specific than your description suggests: the central street becomes pedestrian-only, a dual-carriageway loop surrounds much of the centre, and the northern shops are replaced by a bus station, shopping centre and car park. Describe these key changes and what remains, rather than judging the plan as “more convenient.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by descriptions of the current and planned layouts, with a concluding sentence. This gives the reader a basic progression from the first map to the second. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, such as “to begin with” and “on the other hand,” and the final “to sum up” repeats an opinion rather than bringing together the map changes. Within the current-map paragraph, the locations of the roads, park, school and housing are difficult to follow because the relationships are not clearly ordered. Organise each map description by area—north, central street, then south—and use precise references such as “north of” and “to the east of.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a town plan, including “main road,” “residential area,” “ring road,” “bus stop” and “parking area.” This gives you a basic range for the topic. However, several choices are inaccurate or informal for map reporting: “process of development” suggests stages, “renovation of land” is not a natural description of the planned changes, and “new things” is too vague. Spelling errors such as “scheam,” “middel” and “esily,” along with repeated general words such as “town” and “things,” reduce precision. Build a more specific set of terms for locations and map features, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a comparison introduced by “on the other hand” and a relative clause in “ring road, which helpes the residents.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors make some relationships difficult to understand. For example, “the land is divided into 4 main things as you see there is a main road” joins clauses without suitable punctuation, while “in the middel of park and school there is a residential area is located” has an incorrect sentence structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “the diagram explain” and “it offers.” Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using clauses and clear punctuation.

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