Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE TWO MAPS ILLUSTRATE THE ISLIP TOWN CENTRE. IN THE FIRST MAP,WHICH DESCIBES THAT WHAT DEVELOPMENTS DEVELOP IN THE CURRENT TIME .WHILE,OTHER WAS PLANNED DEVELOPEMNT .
IT CAN BE CLEARLY SEEN THAT IN THE PAST CENTRE , LOSTS OF DEVELOPMENTS SUCH AS BUS STATION , SHOPPING CENTRE , CAR PARK AND NEW HOUSING ALL ARE CONVERTED INTO SHOPS.ALL FACULTIES PROVDES UNDER ONE ROOF.PARK IS BUILDED AT THE EDGE OF THE ROAD WHICH IS LOCATED AT THE EAST SIDE.
FUTHERMORE,NO DUAL CARRIAGEWAY MORE.PEDESTRIANS WAY CONVERT INTO MAIN ROAD SO THAT EVERYBODY CAN USE ONE ROAD.LASTLY.ONLY ONE WAY ALLOW FOR SCHOOL WHICH IS SAFE FOR ALL STUDENTS.IT IS ALSO LOCATED IN THE CORNER OF THE SOUTH WEST.NEW HOUSING IS REMOVED FROM THE CURRENT ISLIP TOWN CENTRE.
IN CONCLUTION,ONLY ONE MOJOR CHANGE HAVE BEEN SEEN THAT WHICH IS MAIN ROAD.BECAUSE IN THE PAST, ONLY PEDESTRAINS COULD BE USED BUT NOW ONE MAIN ROAD FOE EVERYONE.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the current town centre with the proposed development. However, the description is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the student claims that the bus station and car park are 'converted into shops' and that 'new housing is removed,' which contradicts the visual evidence provided in the maps. The overview is weak and fails to capture the main trends, such as the expansion of the shopping centre or the addition of the new housing area. The information is presented in a way that is difficult to follow, and the lack of clarity regarding the changes significantly impacts the overall task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by confusing phrasing and poor sentence structure. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'In conclusion,' but they are often applied incorrectly or do not link ideas logically. The referencing is unclear; for instance, the phrase 'other was planned development' is grammatically incomplete and makes the transition between the two maps difficult to follow. The overall structure lacks the necessary flow required for a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'faculties' (likely meaning facilities) and 'builded' (incorrect verb form). The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe urban planning features, relying on basic descriptions like 'one road' or 'everybody can use one road.' While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in word formation and collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('only one way allow'), tense usage ('have been seen'), and sentence fragments ('WHICH DESCIBES THAT WHAT DEVELOPMENTS DEVELOP'). Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing and missing spaces after periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. The frequency of these errors is high, which significantly affects the clarity of the communication.
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