Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Commence with devolopment of Islip town, there should be some highlighted significant features and framework. Old town will undergo in structural and planned construction where one main road will be eleminated and replaced with pedistrians only. Moreover road is divided into two dual carriagge way both in North and South direction for easy convenience. By keeping in mind about drastically increasing population housing scheme will divide into different categories alongside park will be made which would be accessible for every gender and every age group from childrens's activities to youth's picnic point. Likewise, newly designd strcture also play a crucial role in providing safety and access to local residence by constructing bus station and car parking. In contrast, the planned structure of Islip town provide easy access to daily life accessories in more precatious way by keeping roads on far side and framing special centers in front of each other while allowing citizens and customers to travel along both sides of road easily. More significantly children's school is designed to constructes near carriage way and housing society so parents can pic and drop their children safely and easily without any inconvenience. In nutshell, planned designed will bring properity and progress in whole town while using modern techniques.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying key changes, such as the removal of the main road and the addition of housing and facilities. However, the description is somewhat generic and lacks precise reference to the spatial layout provided in the maps. For instance, it mentions 'housing scheme' and 'park' but fails to clearly contrast the 'now' and 'future' states with specific detail. The overview is missing, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. The response focuses more on interpreting the purpose of the changes rather than objectively reporting the visual data. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the main trends and use specific directional or locational language to describe the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is written as a single block of text, which significantly hinders coherence. Paragraphing is essential in IELTS writing to separate the introduction, overview, and body details. While there are some cohesive devices used, such as 'Moreover', 'In contrast', and 'In nutshell', their usage is sometimes mechanical or slightly misused. The progression of ideas is occasionally difficult to follow because the information is not grouped logically. To reach a higher band, you must use clear paragraph breaks and ensure that each paragraph has a distinct focus, such as one for the current layout and one for the proposed developments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'devolopment', 'eleminated', 'pedistrians', 'designd', 'strcture', 'residence', 'precatious', and 'properity'. These errors, combined with awkward collocations like 'daily life accessories' and 'easy convenience', occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While there is an attempt to use topic-specific language, the lack of precision and the frequency of spelling mistakes limit the score. Focusing on accurate spelling and learning common collocations related to urban planning (e.g., 'pedestrianised zone', 'residential area', 'infrastructure') would greatly enhance your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the' is often missing), subject-verb agreement ('housing scheme will divide'), and sentence structure. For example, 'Commence with devolopment of Islip town' is an incomplete and ungrammatical opening. Many sentences are clunky, such as 'By keeping in mind about drastically increasing population housing scheme will divide into different categories'. While there is an attempt at complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on the correct use of prepositions and articles.
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