Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the shown two map illustrate the centre of a small town called islip as it is just now , and plans for its development . i will explain in the paragraph .
overveiw , the two map are provided in the graph and first map provided in the front main road and the second map front in the map is pedestrians only . and they are provided are bus station , shopping centre , car park .
firstly , main road in the front and the country side provided is the shops and the housing oposide in the shops , and the western side provided the school and the eastern side park .
secondly , islip town centre they are front of the pedestrains only and the northen side bus station , shopping centre , car park , new housing and the southern side shops , housing , park and school .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the main features. The description of the 'current' map is confusing, and the 'planned' map is described with significant inaccuracies regarding the location of facilities. The overview is weak and lacks a clear comparison of the key changes, such as the pedestrianisation of the main road or the relocation of housing. The response does not adequately highlight the significant developments, resulting in a failure to fully address the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'provided' and 'in the front'. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to identify which map or which specific area of the town is being discussed. The lack of logical flow between sentences and paragraphs significantly hinders the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic words like 'map', 'provided', and 'side', which are used incorrectly in several instances. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated or precise vocabulary related to urban planning or map description (e.g., 'pedestrianised', 'relocated', 'converted', or 'situated'). Frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'front in the map is pedestrians only', impede the clarity of the information being conveyed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear main verb, such as 'the shown two map illustrate'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use simple sentences, the lack of control over basic grammar and the absence of complex structures make the writing difficult to read and understand.
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