Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided maps campare the presnt stucture of the lslip and the proposal for its enhancement in the future. Overall, the proposed plan in the future, plenty evolution will take place, main road will be expended to countyside and will converted into ring road along with dual carriageway throughout the town.
To commence, in the north shops in both sides of the main road will demolish and new buildings will be constructed such as bus station, shopping centre, car parking, new housing and pedestrains. the shops will be build in the middle of the town to approchable for everyone in the town.
Going into the depth, in the southwest and southeast new housing will be assemble. However, school in the southeast, and housing in the south will remain unchanged. and the location of the park will uniform but the volume will be smaller to accomodate ring road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the maps, noting the replacement of shops with a bus station, shopping centre, and car park, as well as the addition of a dual carriageway and pedestrianised zone. However, there are several misreadings of the visual data: the student states that the main road will be 'converted into ring road along with dual carriageway', whereas the dual carriageway actually forms a loop around the town centre while the main road becomes pedestrian-only. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words was not met, as the response contains only 147 words. These shortcomings place this criterion at band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is hindered by abrupt transitions and disjointed sentences such as 'Going into the depth, in the southwest and southeast new housing will be assemble.' Cohesive devices are occasionally mechanical or misused ('To commence', 'Going into the depth'), and referencing is sometimes unclear. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks the clear overall progression expected at higher bands, resulting in a band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to map description, such as 'enhancement', 'pedestrians', and 'accommodate'. However, there is a very high density of word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'campare', 'presnt', 'stucture', 'lslip', 'expended', 'countyside', 'demolish' (used instead of demolished), 'approchable', 'assemble' (used instead of assembled), and 'uniform' (used instead of uniform in location). These lexical inaccuracies and non-standard forms constrain the response to band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control of grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, voice, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'shops in both sides of the main road will demolish', 'the shops will be build', and 'location of the park will uniform'. Punctuation is also neglected in places, such as missing capitalisation and run-on phrasing. Because errors are frequent and occasionally impede smooth understanding, the grammar is awarded a band 4.0.
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