Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The development of Islip plan is that road will invert into dual carriageway and where only shop is ocupping the space it invert into bus satation car parking near the shopping centre so no one park the car on road which will a difficulty for traffic and new housing society near market where every thing available and for people crossing the pedestrians road divide so no struggle for road traffic and pedestrians and park for children also inculded so they can enjoy there free time and older go for walk shops also available for buying goods for daily life the school wiil be at the location as current and two housing society in north and the other one south of carriageway before main road is straight but now the dual cariageway touch the every place like to new housing bus station shopping centre car parking and shopes and park also school also on main location
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the main changes shown in the maps, such as the introduction of a dual carriageway, pedestrianisation of the main street, and the addition of a bus station, shopping centre, and new housing. However, the information is presented in a very confused and disjointed manner without a clear overview. Key details are missed or inaccurate, such as the precise locations of the new features relative to the old ones. The text falls short of fully developing a well-organised summary of the visual data, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors where the task is addressed only minimally and key features are insufficiently reported.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks paragraphing entirely, appearing as a single, long, run-on sentence string. There is an almost complete absence of cohesive devices, and conjunctions like 'and' are overused to link disparate clauses. Logical progression is severely hindered by the lack of punctuation and clear signposting, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the maps. This reflects Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and cohesive devices are inadequate or faulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations (e.g., 'road will invert into dual carriageway', 'housing society', 'bus satation'). Spelling mistakes are present (e.g., 'ocupping', 'satation', 'inculded', 'shopes'), and there is little attempt to use less common lexical items appropriate for an academic report. The range is limited and frequently strains the reader's understanding, fitting the Band 4 profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists almost entirely of a single massive, run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation, capitalisation, and clause boundaries. There are severe issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and missing articles. Complex sentence forms are virtually non-existent, and the frequent errors frequently distort meaning and hinder communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.
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