Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

So basically this area refers to a housing society where there are several facility where as pic 1 comtains some main areas such as houses school and shops ,moreover pic 2 contain further car parking area , shopping malls and bus station as well . Additionally there is not proper route in pic one while pic 2 contain a round road but it has only one way to enter, like one main entrance where all the other areas are connected , a problem could be occur during bus stops passenger whenever they wanted to travel some where if they are coming from out of society firstly they to enter taking a long route they whenever they will came back they gonna suffer the same haktik, so the society should do some changes by improving same separate routes for every department so each one would have there own route and people could travel easily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the two maps of Islip, mentioning the presence of houses, a school, shops, a car park, shopping malls, and a bus station. However, the student severely misunderstands the nature of an IELTS Academic Task 1 response by including personal opinions, unsolicited advice, and evaluative commentary (e.g., 'a problem could be occur during bus stops passenger... so the society should do some changes'). In addition, key geographical relationships and comprehensive comparisons are largely missed or poorly articulated. According to Band 4 and Band 5 descriptors, the response presents information minimally, with inappropriate tone and lack of clear objective reporting, leading to a score of 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is written as a single, continuous, run-on paragraph without appropriate paragraphing. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, relying on conversational discourse markers like 'So basically' and run-on structures. There is no clear logical progression or structuring of information, making the text difficult to follow. Pronoun referencing is often confusing ('this area', 'there', 'same haktik'). This aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and informal ('housing society', 'pic 1', 'haktik' for hectic). There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'comtains', 'contain', 'tahing', 'there' instead of 'their', 'same' instead of 'some'). The lexical range is extremely limited and inadequate for academic writing, reflecting a Band 4 performance where vocabulary errors constantly strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting primarily of long, run-on sentences joined poorly by conjunctions and prepositions. There are severe grammatical errors throughout, such as missing subjects, incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'whenever they wanted to travel some where if they are coming from out of society firstly they to enter taking a long route'). Punctuation is faulty, and error frequency is extremely high, fully matching the Band 4 descriptor where errors distort meaning and make comprehension difficult.

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