Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the diagram depict the center of small town called slipas it now and plans fo its development overall some feature remaining the same plan development has add more amenities in slip town center first of all now lslip town center ther are three main road east -west and north side the housing located in north side and shops also along the road countryside is situated with shops at end of north area the school and park is located east- West wside at end of plans development has circle road weat - east and north- south side there are manu amenities bus station shopping center and news housing are added the school facility remain same as compared to development the main road has supplanted pedestrians only .the Dual carriageway along the road in west side the car park is located in the new housing the park and shops remaining the same categories respectively
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of Islip town centre, noting the addition of a dual carriageway, a bus station, a shopping centre, and the conversion of the main road into a pedestrian-only zone. However, the task achievement is severely hampered by poor organisation, numerous inaccuracies in transposing the spatial relationships, and an underdeveloped overview. While the student identifies some key features, the lack of clarity and logical grouping means that important changes are only partially addressed. The description often becomes confusing, such as mentioning the school and park incorrectly in relation to the compass points. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from a fundamental lack of proper paragraphing, punctuation, and cohesive devices. The entire response is essentially a single run-on sentence block without proper capitalisation or full stops, which makes following the logical progression extremely difficult. While there is a weak attempt at an overview phrase ('overall some feature remaining the same'), the sentences are strung together haphazardly with conjunctions or left unpunctuated. Referencing is unclear and transitions between the current state and the proposed development are blurred. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on the terms provided directly in the prompt such as 'housing', 'shops', 'park', 'school', and 'bus station'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'slipas' instead of Islip, 'fo' for for, 'manu' for many, and 'news housing' for new housing. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'supplanted' and 'amenities', but these are used inaccurately or clumsily within the sentence structures. The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader, placing it firmly in the Band 4 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatically, the response is extremely weak. There is a total absence of standard sentence boundaries, punctuation, and capitalisation throughout the text. The writer relies heavily on simple structures, and attempts at more complex formations result in severe errors, such as missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the housing located in north side', 'the school and park is located'). Errors are frequent and pervasive, often distorting the intended meaning and causing significant difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4 level of grammatical control.
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