Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This map illustrates the future redevelopment plans for Islip, and what changes and replacements are made from present Islip town centre.

A striking feature of data is if we compare both, town centres' current design with planned one, It has completely changed. In the foreseeable future, it was planned to completely renovate the structure of Islip town by replacing north-side commercial shops by contructing bus station, maal, and parking for cars. In addition they build new town houses at north-east side of the main road, and also in front of the park. They made dual carriageway around the town center which will be beneficial for traffic flow on road.

Furthermore, school for chiderns, and the south-east side commercial area remains same, while they reduce the size of park. Moreover, Islip town redesigned map not just solving a problem of traffic jam, it also provide safety to the visitor on main road by making perestrians for walking person.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast between the existing centre and the proposed redevelopment, including the northern shops being replaced by a bus station, shopping centre and car park, the new housing, the dual carriageway, and the smaller park. The overview that the layout will change substantially is relevant, and you also note that the southern shops and school remain. This covers the key direction of change, with some details less fully or precisely reported: for example, the central street will become pedestrian-only, and the school and some housing remain outside the carriageway loop. The claim that the plan will solve traffic congestion and improve visitor safety is not shown by the maps. More precise coverage of the layout, without predicting benefits, would make the summary more complete and firmly grounded in the visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression: an introduction, a broad comparison, and a final paragraph describing features that remain or change. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between points. However, the second paragraph combines several changes in a long sequence, so the reader has to work to distinguish the northern redevelopment, new housing, and road system. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “in front of the park,” which does not specify the location precisely, and the final sentence shifts from describing the plan to asserting its benefits. Grouping northern changes, southern changes, and transport arrangements more clearly—and using references such as “to the north of the pedestrian street”—would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “redevelopment,” “dual carriageway,” “commercial,” and “reduce the size of park,” and the reader can generally understand the intended changes. There is some attempt at more specific language, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal: “maal” for “shopping centre,” “parking for cars” for “car park,” and “town houses” where “new housing” is meant. Spelling errors such as “contructing,” “chiderns,” and “perestrians” also reduce accuracy. Phrases such as “striking feature of data” and “commercial area” are not natural or precise in this context. Use the map’s labels where possible and check spelling and collocation to make the description clearer and more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a comparison clause (“if we compare both”) and a contrast introduced by “while.” However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the description difficult to follow. For example, “A striking feature of data is if we compare both” is not a complete, well-formed construction, while “they reduce the size of park” lacks an appropriate article and has an unclear subject. The sentence beginning “Moreover” also joins several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Aim for shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles and agreement—for example, “the park is reduced in size” and “the school remains unchanged.”

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