Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map gives the information 0f town which is named as Islip .It is now in basic structure It will develope in future.

Overall the main change will be in development of town the shape will be more eloborate moreover there will be a dual carriageway ,proper locations and positions will avalaible for bus station , shoping center etc.

At the moment in town only park is located in east but in developed planne there will be correction place for housing , new housing .Park is so fundamental right now no proper roads atre avalaible but in future there will be correct roadways for shoping, schools.

Now town does not has parking area new housing proper structure of shopping center . In develeoped town the school will not include in dual carriageway .Housing , school will be outside from this massive arae.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the town and recognise that the plan introduces a dual carriageway and new facilities, so the response is relevant to the maps. However, the summary is only partial: it does not clearly compare the existing and planned layouts, and several details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the park is not simply a new provision; it already exists and becomes smaller. The plan also retains the southern shops and places the school and some housing outside the carriageway, while the northern shops are replaced by a bus station, shopping centre and car park. The response is 142 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a clear overview of the main changes and report the key locations accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and further comments about the present and planned town. This gives the reader some sense of the topic. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear, consistent order, and the comparisons are difficult to follow. The paragraph beginning “At the moment” shifts between the park, housing and roads without explaining their positions, while “Now town does not has parking area” introduces a detail without linking it clearly to the planned car park. Some linking words, such as “moreover,” are used, but connections between points remain weak. Group information by map or by area, and use clear contrasts such as “currently” and “under the plan.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “dual carriageway,” “bus station,” “housing” and “park,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description unclear, such as “proper locations,” “correction place” and “massive arae.” There are also repeated general terms such as “town,” “development” and “structure,” where more precise language about the map would be useful. Aim to describe changes with accurate verbs and location phrases—for example, facilities are “added,” shops are “replaced,” and housing is “located to the south.” Careful spelling and natural collocations will make your meaning easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, including “Overall the main change will be…” and “In the developed town the school will not include…”. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “It is now in basic structure,” “town does not has” and “the school will not include in dual carriageway.” These show problems with articles, verb forms and sentence construction. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and unclear sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate simple comparisons first, such as “The school remains outside the dual carriageway,” then add longer sentences using clear clauses and correct verb forms.

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