Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this map slow a town which name is islip town the town is going through the project thats make devlopment in the town in the first map we see there was an countryside with behind shops and park we devlop some more centre and station for bus and makes the planned devlopment for our town people . as we add bus station and shopping centre centre and with car park to make roads clear and new housing to the town and makes main road to pedestrians only with dual carriageway and lots of space for an shops and new housing for people who live there freely and the towns covered in round shape of roads and better resources option in town. and also we makes clear main road to school direct and make our town bigger and safe with clear road when wee devlope our town then people make attention to our town and make more housing for peples

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the general purpose of the plans: the town centre is to be redeveloped, with a bus station, shopping centre, car park, new housing and a pedestrian-only main street. However, the response reports the maps only partially and does not give a clear overview of the main changes. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: for example, the countryside is described as being “behind shops,” while the planned layout’s key arrangement—bus station, shopping centre and car park north of the pedestrian street—is not explained. The claim that the road to the school will be made direct is also not supported by the map. To improve, compare the present and planned layouts accurately, including what remains, what is replaced and the dual-carriageway loop.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response stays broadly focused on the town’s development and mentions several relevant features, but the information is presented as one long sequence rather than in a clear, organised summary. The opening moves from the existing map to the plans, yet there is no distinct overview followed by grouped details. Linking phrases such as “and also” and repeated uses of “and” do not show the relationships between changes, so it is difficult to follow which features are north or south of the main street and what is retained. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and organise details by area or by existing versus planned features. Clearer referencing would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bus station,” “shopping centre,” “car park,” “pedestrians only” and “dual carriageway,” which helps identify planned features. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or repetitive, such as “make development,” “clear road” and “more housing.” Spelling errors, including “devlopment,” “peoples” and “wee,” also reduce accuracy and can make the message harder to read. Aim for precise map-description vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, describe facilities as being “added” or “constructed,” and say that a road “forms a loop around” the centre. Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “make” when a more exact verb is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to control. For example, “this map slow a town which name is islip town” lacks accurate verb forms and a clear sentence pattern, while “as we add bus station and shopping centre centre and with car park” does not form a complete, well-structured clause. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “we devlop” and “the towns covered.” Articles and plurals are frequently missing or misplaced. These errors sometimes obscure the intended relationships between features. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses such as “The shops north of the road will be replaced by…”

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