Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The below chart illustrate that in the middle of a small town are known as Islip as it is preasnt moreover plans for its devlopment.

overall the islip town becoming considerably more commercialized and densely populated.as new shops and shopping centreare build .

looking first at the northern half of the map,significant development took places along the main road such as bus station has build or new shopping centres are open and in the corner they also give car parking and in the middle they also give pedidtrian area for eassy to walk for peiople . Although you enterd in the town you see new housing area is al

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the general subject and offer an overview that the town will become more commercialised and densely populated, which is relevant to the plans. You also mention the bus station, shopping centre, car parking and pedestrian area. However, the response covers only a small part of the maps and ends before describing the southern changes, including the retained shops, new housing, smaller park, and dual-carriageway loop. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: the plans show facilities being developed, not that they “are open,” and the northern facilities are arranged from west to east rather than simply “in the corner.” The response is also 41 words below the required minimum. To develop the summary, report the main changes across both maps and make clear comparisons between the present and planned layouts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving to the northern part of the map. The phrase “looking first at the northern half” signals a shift in focus, and “Although” attempts to connect ideas. However, the response has no clear progression through the whole plan: it stops mid-sentence at “new housing area is al,” and the southern features are not covered. Several ideas are crowded into one long sentence, while links such as “moreover” and “Although” do not clearly express the relationships between them. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main map changes, and describe locations in a consistent order, such as north to south or west to east.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “main road,” “bus station,” “shopping centre,” “car parking,” and “pedestrian area,” and “commercialized” conveys a broad change in the town’s character. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make the description difficult to follow, for example “preasnt,” “devlopment,” “pedidtrian,” and “eassy.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “they also give car parking” and “new shopping centres are open” do not clearly describe the planned facilities. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and collocations, such as “a car park is planned” and “the central street will be pedestrianised.” Proofread spelling carefully, especially for key labels from the map.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “overall … as new shops…” and “Although you enterd in the town…,” but these are not controlled successfully. Errors in sentence formation and verb forms occur frequently: “The below chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “bus station has build” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence is difficult to parse, and the final clause is incomplete, ending with “is al.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also weak, with missing spaces after commas and a long sequence of ideas joined together. These problems sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise writing complete, simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check agreement, articles, and past or future forms when describing what exists now and what is planned.

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