Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Islip town shows the outstanding strucutre of town, as we can clearly indicate that, there are lost of noticable things like; Shops. Housing, Park, School and country side. we can identify these spots very far from each spot.

This town have much more potential to grow, likewise in development sector. However, this will require many capital. As we can see, if we developed this town so we will get many benfits for instance, Bus station will help local citizen for easy access of transportation. Shopping centre and car park plays a vital role in any particular town, as there will be more bussiness investment through shopping centre and there will be less traffic. New housing allows many more residents to build their houses in proper way. If we make camparision between old Islip town and new Islip town, so in every aspect new Islip town is more better because of better development in social and economcial sectors

In my point of view, new Islip town will have more impact rather than old, This will lead to direclty

attract other towns people beacouse of many remarkable deveolpment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that Islip is planned to gain facilities such as a bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing, and it attempts to compare the existing and proposed town. However, it mainly discusses the benefits of development rather than summarising the maps. Important spatial changes are missing: the dual-carriageway loop, the pedestrian-only central street, the replacement of the northern shops, and the retention of the school and some housing outside the loop. The claim that the new town will reduce traffic and attract people from other towns is not established by the map. To improve, give a concise overview of the main physical changes, then describe the key locations and what remains unchanged, without adding predictions or opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the opening introduces the town, the next paragraph discusses proposed development, and the final paragraph gives a concluding view. The response also uses linking expressions such as “However,” “As we can see,” and “If we make comparison.” Nevertheless, progression is weak because the paragraphs do not systematically describe the present map and then the planned map. Several ideas are joined in long sentences, and the final paragraph repeats the claim that the new town will have a greater impact without adding map information. Plan the response around an overview and two focused descriptions, using clear references to north, south, east and west. This would make the sequence easier to follow and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “Bus station,” “Shopping centre,” “car park,” “residents,” and “transportation,” so the general subject is understandable. There is also an effort to use less basic language, for example “vital role” and “investment.” However, vocabulary is often imprecise or unsuitable for an objective map report: “outstanding structure,” “spots,” and “more better” do not describe the changes accurately. Spelling errors such as “strucutre,” “noticable,” “benfits,” and “economcial” are noticeable, while “country side” is not the map’s label. Use precise map vocabulary such as “is located,” “is replaced by,” and “remains,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and conditional structures, such as “if we developed this town so we will get many benefits,” but these are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in “This town have” and “Shopping centre and car park plays,” while “this will require many capital” shows problems with countability and sentence construction. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is left unfinished after “directly.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Build accuracy first with clear present-tense descriptions of the maps, for example, “The main road is planned to become pedestrian-only.” Then add a few controlled complex sentences, checking subject–verb agreement, articles and complete sentence boundaries.

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