Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The image depict the comperison between islip town center in thes days and next plane for up to dated for up coming days. they find twice as much as for up grated the town center.

the most noticeable feature, they want to expand the area and add some more facilities for the people and they have many things to include to facelitate the peple.

made up the largest share they plane to contribute in shops and expand the area, for the explemation they want to upgrate the country side to make a circal of ring road , then they want to update the area from the north and west side shops in a bus station, shopping center and card parking. then they want to expand the north east side and converd the dhops in to new housing and make a way from ring road in a center want to pedestrians only then for shops.they want to do park cunjested and add more new housing and they want to move school outside the ring road and expand the school area on the west south side. they have a good future plane to upgrade the town.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad purpose of the plans—to expand the town centre and add facilities—and mention several relevant changes, including a bus station, shopping centre, car park, pedestrian-only street, new housing and a ring road. However, the account is only partially accurate and developed. For example, the countryside is not described as being upgraded; the dual carriageway loops around the centre, while the countryside label disappears from the planned map. You also say the school will be moved and expanded, but it remains in its original southern area outside the loop. The overview that the town will expand is useful, but it should clearly summarise the main transformation and distinguish what remains from what changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic progression from a general introduction to a description of planned changes, and words such as “then” help signal sequence. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, so the overview and specific map details are not clearly separated. The long final sentence moves rapidly between the northern facilities, housing, the pedestrian street, shops, park and school, making relationships between features difficult to follow. Some linking is also unclear, as in “then for shops” and “they want to do park cunjested.” Organise the response into clear paragraphs and group details by area—for example, changes north of the pedestrian street, then changes to the south.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt relevant map vocabulary, including “bus station,” “shopping center,” “ring road,” “pedestrians only” and “new housing,” which shows some awareness of the topic. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to recover: “comperison,” “up grated,” “card parking” and “cunjested” are examples. Several expressions are also unsuitable or unclear, such as “made up the largest share” and “conver[d] the shops into new housing.” Use precise map language and check spelling; for instance, describe facilities as being “added” or “replaced,” and say that the park is “reduced in size” rather than “congested.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some clauses to connect changes, but control is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended relationships. The opening, “The image depict the comperison,” has a subject–verb agreement error and lacks a clear grammatical construction. Verb forms and sentence patterns are also unreliable in phrases such as “they plane to contribute in shops” and “make a way from ring road in a center want to pedestrians only.” Punctuation is limited, and the final sentence contains many ideas joined without clear boundaries. Build accuracy first with short, complete sentences, then combine related details using controlled clauses such as “The main road will become pedestrian-only, while a dual carriageway will loop around the centre.”

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