Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This maps shows that the islip town . Overall it is evedict a small town having directions and going to establish . Moreover there is a school towords downside of the south direction. . Along with there os a housing of people where they are living. Although there is a park in the direction of east. Mean while in the center there are shops and main road in the middle of shops.

In the second map there is a fully devolped town. Every thing changed.There ia main big road from the outer side of the buildings. There is a park from the downword of the east. Moastly there are shops in the cnter of that map. In the north coner new housing is over there. There is a bus station from the west . and the shipping center along with bus station, Although it is well establish map but there is pedesteian point in the form of walking people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant features, including the school, park, shops, main road, bus station and shopping centre, and you recognise that the second map shows planned development. However, the account is only a partial summary: it does not clearly compare the two maps or give a reliable overview of the main changes. For example, “Every thing changed” is too general, and the planned pedestrian-only street and dual-carriageway loop are not explained accurately. Some locations are also misreported: the new housing is not simply in the north corner, and the southern shops remain. To improve, state the major changes in an overview, then describe the northern and southern areas with clear before-and-after comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to separate the present map from the planned map, using “In the second map” to signal a shift, and some details are grouped by location. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because features are listed without a clear organising principle. Connectors such as “Moreover,” “Although” and “Mean while” are sometimes used inaccurately or do not show a logical relationship; for instance, “Although it is well establish map but” combines contrasting linkers without a clear contrast. The repeated “there is” also makes the description feel like a list. Organise the response into an overview and then focused comparisons, using location-based sequencing and simpler, more accurate linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant map terms, such as “school,” “park,” “housing,” “bus station” and “main road,” so the reader can identify some of the features being described. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding. Examples include “evedict,” “devolped,” “cnter,” “shipping center” and “pedesteian point”; the intended terms are not always immediately clear. “Fully developed town” and “main big road” are also imprecise descriptions of the plan. Build a more accurate set of map vocabulary, including “dual carriageway,” “pedestrian-only street,” “shopping centre” and “new housing,” and use verbs such as “replaced,” “retained” and “expanded” to describe changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “Although there is a park…” and “Although it is well establish map but…,” but most sentences rely on simple “there is” constructions, and the longer attempts are not controlled. Errors in sentence structure and agreement occur frequently, as in “This maps shows” and “there are shops in the cnter,” while “there is a housing” shows difficulty with articles and countability. Verb forms are also inaccurate in “it is well establish map,” and punctuation includes repeated full stops and inconsistent sentence boundaries. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses to compare locations and changes.

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