Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is fact that at the recent time, the population of few countries includes a relatively large number of young stunners, compred with the number of older citizens. This have some merits and demerits too. The primary merits are young stunners have high energy and stamina and they also have smart solutions for new difficulties. The primary demerits are young stunners doesn't have working experience like older individuals and they doesn't have some traditional experienced solution lke older adults.

On the one hand, there are some merits of having large number of young stunners in some countries. To begin with first merit which is having high energy and stamina, Young individuals have high energy and stamina compared to older citizen because of their age difference and immunity system. Due to this they can work more without feeling lazy. A clear example is, back to 2024 when I was new at my job at that time I used to work 14 hours a day and the older citizen who worked there they work only 7-8 hours a day. It clearly illustrates the energy difference of two different age groups. In addition, youngs stunners also have some enhanced solution for the problems because young adults are well educated and they use technologies to overcome from their difficulties.

On the other hand, there are few demerits of having large number of young adults and the primary disadvantage is lack of experience. Young adults doesn't have that much experience compared to older adults because of their working experience. For instance, back to 2024 when I was new at my job at that time I have more energy but no experience and I used to learn from the older citizens. Furthermore, older citizens also have some traditional or their working experience solutions which young stunners doesn't have and young stunners have to work atleast 10-12 years to get that type of experience solution for any kind of difficulties.

Therefore, having relatively large number of Young stunnes in some countries is outstanding for the country but they also need help of older adults because without getting knowledge and experience from older citizen then young stunners can't contribute that much for the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question by discussing young people’s energy and use of technology, as well as their limited work experience, and your conclusion recognises that younger people can benefit from older adults’ knowledge. However, the central question is whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your position is not fully clear: calling the situation “outstanding” suggests the advantages outweigh the drawbacks, but the conclusion also stresses dependence on older people. The examples from your job are relevant, yet they mainly compare working hours and your own learning; they do not fully show the wider effects on a country. State your judgement directly and develop the national consequences of each side more clearly. The response meets the task’s length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for advantages, one for disadvantages, and a conclusion. The contrast between “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” helps readers follow the two sides, and examples are placed with the relevant points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, as in “To begin with first merit,” and several ideas repeat the same claims about energy or experience without adding much development. Some references are also unclear, particularly “they work only 7-8 hours” and “that type of experience solution.” Use more precise links between claims and examples, and make each paragraph build towards your final judgement rather than simply listing points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “stamina,” “working experience,” “traditional,” and “technologies,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “young stunners” and “older citizens.” Some word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “enhanced solution,” “overcome from their difficulties,” and “experience solution.” Spelling errors, including “compred,” “lke,” and “stunnes,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases and vary how you refer to age groups. For example, “young adults” and “older workers” are more suitable than “young stunners” in this formal essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, errors occur frequently in verb agreement and sentence construction. For example, “This have some merits” should be “This has some merits,” while “young adults doesn’t have” should be “young adults don’t have.” Tense control is also inconsistent in the job example: “I used to work” is followed by “they work,” where a past form is needed. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention too, as in “having large number” and the comma splice in “A clear example is, back to 2024…” Practise accurate basic clauses before adding complex structures.

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