Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, some countries have majority of the young population than the senior citizen. while, there are several drawbacks associated with it, I believe that positive aspects are considerable greater than its drawbacks.

One major benefit is that, younger ones enhance the growth and development of the country. For example, new generation are familiar with modern technology which improves the workload by using the modern machinery which saves the valuable time of workers and enhance to quantity. Similarly, young adults, use the internet and some websites to connect the people all over the world as well as they improves their skills by exchanging their ideas as well as they research some latest technologies which they use and get familiar with their merits and demerits. Also, the discover new methods of sales such as sales on websites where everyone sees the products and advertise them on an international level which improves the country's economy.

On the other hand, old people are the backbone of the country, they teach morals and values to the further generations and help the adults in some household chores. Firstly, older ones take care of their grandchildren by teaching them historic stories and ethics which would be helpful for the ward's upbringing. Secondly, senior citizens have some life experiences which are not available on the internet .

In conclusion, while , there are several negative aspects of the minimal ratio of old people. It is undeniable that new generation brings multiple latest ideas to improve the country's growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of a young population. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While the benefits of technology and economic growth are mentioned, the discussion on the disadvantages is quite brief and lacks depth, focusing more on the general role of the elderly rather than the specific societal challenges of a youth-heavy demographic. The position is clear, but the arguments could be more thoroughly extended to reach a higher band. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'One major benefit', 'Similarly', and 'On the other hand'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'as well as'. Additionally, there are some minor issues with referencing and sentence-level flow, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between ideas could be smoother. Overall, the logical flow is sufficient, but it lacks the sophisticated management of cohesion required for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'modern machinery', 'upbringing', and 'international level'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of awkward phrasing or imprecise word choices, such as 'younger ones' instead of 'younger generations' or 'enhance to quantity'. There is also a lack of more sophisticated, academic collocations that would elevate the response. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and flexibility expected at higher levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('new generation are', 'they discover'), article usage ('the discover'), and punctuation. Some sentences are slightly disjointed due to these errors. While the writer attempts complex structures, the control over these is inconsistent. To improve, the student should focus on basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed without errors that distract the reader.

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