Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The following passage is showing that the population is increasing day by day. In most countries the population is increasing rapidly . These countries are undeveloped countries. This has very bad effect on these countries. Because the resources are limited.They are running out with the passage of time. So we can say that the increase in population would become very big problem in the future . Earth is limited.In this time the namber of born of people are higher then the number of death. In future the people faced so many difficulties and problems. These days people are facing many kinds of issues. The land is limited and population is increasing. The resources are gradually reducing. In the past the technology was not much advanced . The cure of many diseases were not found in the past. But in the present the technology is much advanced. The treatment of almost all the disease are found. In past the people were healthy and powerful. Because they eat original and naturel things . Now the people are eating fast foods. They increased the fat in the bodies of the people. But we can say that the people of the present time are living long life then the people of the past. The technology of the present is much advanced than the past . All the things for the treatment almost done.In past the people used natural things for the treatment of the patients . That is why we say that the people of the present are living comfortable lives
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the specific prompt regarding the advantages and disadvantages of a population with a large number of young adults. Instead, the essay discusses general population growth, resource depletion, and a comparison between past and present technology and health. Because the essay does not engage with the core topic of 'young adults' versus 'older people,' it is largely off-topic. The ideas presented are generic and do not provide a clear position or relevant arguments related to the demographic shift mentioned in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical progression. Ideas are presented as a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive argument. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text difficult to follow. While there are some attempts at linking ideas using words like 'because' or 'but,' these are often used incorrectly or repetitively. The lack of a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion prevents the development of a coherent response, resulting in a disjointed flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. The student relies on simple, high-frequency words such as 'good,' 'bad,' 'big,' and 'things.' There is little evidence of the ability to use less common lexical items or precise academic vocabulary. Phrases like 'original and naturel things' and 'treatment of almost all the disease are found' demonstrate a limited range and some spelling errors (e.g., 'naturel', 'namber'). The language used is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay consists primarily of simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'treatment of almost all the disease are found'), article usage, and sentence structure. Punctuation is also problematic, with many sentences lacking proper spacing after periods. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of errors occasionally makes the intended meaning difficult to grasp, though the general message remains understandable.
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