Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

All age of group in a society creates healthy environment in lifestyle. There is some contry adding larger number of people of younger generation and few individuals who age of above 60years in total population. i personally believe in having both age group of peoplpe are more adequate. However, Dimerits of only includes more adults in nation rather than older people have an edged over its merits.

This paragraph throw some lights on cons of adding only adults into nation. To begin with the most significant inhibition is poor communication skill with all age group of peple if there is no elder person in life of individual . Along with leck of knowledge about own culture and some ancient traditions because all these things are passess through only by older one in family. As an epitome, The bond between grandfather and grandson is more benefitial for child as grandfather is the first teacher of that child. Another barrier of having not elder one is difficulty to make dicission in critical situation just because lessons of experienced guy is more helpful in tough time.

Another important feature is change in lifestyle and behaviour is less sophisticated. sometimes, suggestions of older people are benefitial in larger amount rather than younger people who have less experience behine techal complicated things. for instance, one of the succesfull businessman in their starting phase deal with many inhibitions ans at some point he stuck at there, But after fail all his tricks he choose to take advice from his grandson and ater that his bussiness grow rapidly. it shows some that words of elder prople work in our life as boon.

On the other hand, there are some benefits of having younger generation such as they are too good at handle new techonology . Moreover, Unique ideas of new generation is sometimes works as a mericle. As example, In designer graphical field the younger genration is improving their revenue is better.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The candidate addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of having a population skewed towards young adults, ultimately taking a clear position that the disadvantages outweigh the merits. The response covers all parts of the task, though the ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion regarding cultural knowledge and decision-making is somewhat repetitive and vague, relying on brief, circular reasoning rather than extended explanation. Examples are attempted, such as the grandfather and grandson bond and the businessman anecdote, but they lack precise detailing and clarity. Overall, the ideas remain basic, pulling the score down to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays an attempt at paragraphing, with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing cons and pros, and an unfinished conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures. Cohesive devices are either inadequate or misused, such as 'As an epitome,' 'Another important feature,' and 'in conclusuin,' which impede the smooth flow of ideas. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact line of argument. While an overall framework exists, the mechanical and faulty cohesion places this response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0 for its basic organizational structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors that strain the reader's comprehension. Examples include 'contry' for country, 'leck' for lack, 'passess' for passed, 'dicission' for decision, and 'techonology'. Phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'all age of group,' 'older one in family,' and 'designer graphical field.' While the student attempts less common items like 'sophisticated,' 'significant inhibition,' and 'rapidly,' the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations limits the effectiveness of communication, resulting in a Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, characterized by frequent, severe errors that constantly distort meaning and cause difficulty for the reader. Simple sentence forms are frequently botched, and attempts at complex structures result in major structural failures, such as 'There is some contry adding larger number of people of younger generation and few individuals who age of above 60years in total population.' Punctuation and capitalization are poorly handled throughout, and missing verbs or incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'work as a mericle,' 'is sometimes works') are pervasive. Due to the constant and pervasive grammatical errors, the response warrants a Band 4.0.

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