Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Task - 2

Everyone in human existence have a different way of thinking and have different mind set, there are more advantages of having young adults in a country's population.

To commence with, young adults numbers, in country's population can lead to several advantages which overweigh the disadvantages but this could only be possible if it is planned very carefully, there are many advantage of this aspect such as it will lead to country to Economic growth, GDP growth, it will help in innovation and tech and have low welfare costs and have potential consumer to spend in market. All of this could be possible if government takes proper steps for example in India there are more young adults than elder people so, government is spending more on Infrastructure, school, housing funding them in physical games they are also helping them by not applying tax on this aspects.

Further more , as a coin have two side there are also disadvantages if the plans are not executed effectively and efficiently like there would be problem of a social risk , there would be pressure for Infrastructure facility and the major problem could be high unemployment which can lead to major threat to other people of country, For example if government did not create enough jobs and good public services one day they could not be able to afford food and basic human facility as they have education but there is lot of competition for job. So creating job is must necessary at this point.

In recapitulation , if by proper planning there are more advantages in many aspect and by not doing it could cause unemployment so, Advantages overweight the disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of having a population with a large proportion of young adults. The writer takes a clear position that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, provided there is careful planning. Ideas are presented regarding economic growth, innovation, and consumer spending, alongside potential drawbacks such as social risks, infrastructural pressure, and unemployment. However, several ideas are underdeveloped and rely on broad generalizations without sufficient elaboration or concrete, deeply analysed examples. For instance, the example regarding India touches upon infrastructure and funding, but remains somewhat superficial. While all parts of the task are addressed, the level of development and extension of ideas places this response firmly in Band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used, though the body paragraphs are lengthy and contain multiple disparate ideas that could be better separated. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'To commence with', 'Further more', and 'In recapitulation', but some of these feel mechanical or are awkwardly phrased (e.g., 'as a coin have two side'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical progression within paragraphs is sometimes disrupted by run-on sentences and punctuation errors, such as comma splices. Overall, the organizational structure is adequate for a Band 5.5 to 6.0, but the management of cohesion needs refinement for a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic ideas about economics, employment, and societal impact. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary items such as 'innovation', 'infrastructure', and 'recapitulation'. However, there are frequent noticeable errors in word choice, morphology, and collocation, such as 'young adults numbers' instead of 'the number of young adults', 'overweigh' instead of 'outweigh', and 'basic human facility' instead of 'basic human needs'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are often faulty and prone to structural breakdowns. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Everyone... have', 'young adults numbers... can lead', 'as a coin have') and run-on sentences with improper comma usage. Punctuation is frequently weak, impeding the flow of ideas. While the meaning is generally retrievable despite the errors, the high frequency of grammatical slips prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0.

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