Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In some countries, the number of the youth is camparitively increased in contrast with the olders in the modern era.No, in my perspective the benefits and limitations of this situation goes side by side.

Currently, many adults who belongs to the under developed

countries are moving towards the developed countries in order to get higher education or for work purposes which ultimately increases the number of adults in some countries and in return the country is benefited by the labour and the brilliants in return give them benefit by their research and new inventions and do work in the place of the older people.In the era of COVID-19 there is a need of volunteers and young adults serve themselves as a volunteer and help country to live in this harsh situation.

As per its drawbacks if the population of young increases more food and water resources are required and country is unable to fulfil the resources in any emergency situation.In addition, the rush in the towns and cities also increases which ultimately results in traffic and more chance of accidents.Crime is more as there are more adults and country is unable to provide a safe a secure environment and it also let the old people to be in their houses.

In the end, the increasing number of adults over older people has advantages as well as disadvantages and those country who are facing this issue should think of it as it is a alarmimg sign.We need to focus on it and do some preventions and some strictness in giving visa.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of a population with a large proportion of young adults. The student's position is somewhat unclear initially, as the opening statement says 'No, in my perspective the benefits and limitations of this situation goes side by side,' which is slightly contradictory. Ideas such as economic contributions from skilled migrants and volunteers during COVID-19 are introduced, while drawbacks such as resource strain and increased crime are also mentioned. However, many of these ideas are under-developed and lack specific supporting examples, leading to a tendency to over-generalize. For instance, the link between a larger youth population and increased crime is stated without adequate explanation or development. Consequently, the task is addressed adequately enough to satisfy the basic requirements, but the depth of discussion places it firmly at a Band 5.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into four paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, showing some overall structural awareness. However, progression is frequently hindered by awkward transitions and poor logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, such as starting body paragraphs with 'Currently,' and 'As per its drawbacks'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'those country who are facing this issue'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is disjointed, jumping abruptly between disparate ideas like COVID-19 volunteering and urban crowding. These limitations mean the organization remains mechanical, warranting a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-formation and collocation errors. Examples include 'camparitively increased', 'the olders', 'the brilliants', and 'a safe a secure environment'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'under developed', 'volunteers', and 'emergency situation', but imprecise word choices and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'camparitively', 'alarmimg') impede readability at times. The range is minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts about the topic, but it lacks the flexibility and precision needed for higher bands. Overall, the lexical features align well with the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on long, run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions, such as the sentence beginning with 'Currently, many adults who belongs...'. Attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to noticeable grammatical errors including subject-verb agreement issues ('adults who belongs', 'country is unable') and missing articles. Punctuation is also problematic, evidenced by missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'era.No, in my perspective'). Frequent errors in grammar and mechanics cause some difficulty for the reader throughout the text, matching the profile for a Band 5.0.

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