Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is believe that there are relatively more younsters in some coutries, in comparison to the adults of old ages in the present time. I argue that the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages as the young people are significantly more healthier and capable as compare to the old ones.

The most crutial reason for this is, youth of this generation are highly intelligent and exceptional than the older people. Their intellectual abilities are much stronger. They have the ability to make the difficult situations easier for them so that they can cope with them. In addition, they can think logically rather than emotionally. For example, a person who is young and intelligent, he is capable of making money online without going to the market. As a result, he does not have to go to market and sit in the shop for long period to earn.

Secondly, they have the extreme knowledge about the internet. They also have the ability to break stereotype. They can make the better use of internet which will be helpful for them. They can make their path easy through their hardwork. For instance, the young nowaday make tools that can amke the work of hours or days into minutes and seconds. This will be beneficial for them. Consequently, they can do anything which they want in a simple and better way.

In conclusion, their extraordinary ability and their intellectual functioning can benefit the country as well as also humans. I belive that they can do something which will improve the country economy and the people in the future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your points about young people’s intellectual abilities and familiarity with the internet are relevant to the topic. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it explains possible benefits but does not discuss any disadvantages, despite being asked to weigh both sides. The supporting examples, such as earning money online and creating tools, are broad and are not developed to show how a younger population benefits society compared with an older one. The conclusion repeats your position but makes a general prediction about improving the economy without explaining how. To strengthen the response, consider one or two disadvantages and compare their importance with specific, developed benefits. The response contains 256 words; 8 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “The most crucial reason” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main direction of your argument. However, progression is limited because both body paragraphs make similar claims about young people’s abilities, and there is no paragraph considering disadvantages or directly weighing the two sides. Some links are mechanical or unclear: “As a result” and “Consequently” introduce outcomes that are not fully explained, while “This will be beneficial for them” repeats the preceding point rather than advancing it. The example beginning “For example, a person who is young and intelligent, he…” also interrupts the flow. Group distinct ideas, explain how each example supports the argument, and use referencing and transitions more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “intellectual abilities,” “logically,” “stereotype,” and “economy,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word-choice or collocation errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “adults of old ages,” “more healthier,” “extreme knowledge,” and “make their path easy.” Spelling errors such as “younsters,” “coutries,” “crutial,” and “belive” are also noticeable. Repeated use of “young,” “ability,” and “make” limits precision. Build a more accurate range for discussing population and social effects, and check spelling and common word partnerships. For example, “a larger proportion of young adults” is more precise than “relatively more youngsters.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few complex forms, including clauses with “so that” and “which,” and use simple sentences to communicate your main points. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently, including in basic sentence patterns. “It is believe” has an incorrect verb form; “as compare to” uses the wrong form after “as”; and “a person who is young and intelligent, he is capable” repeats the subject and creates a faulty clause. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “the young nowaday make tools,” and in “as well as also humans.” These problems sometimes make the reader pause to interpret the sentence. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns, verb forms, and relative clauses, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and main verb.

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