Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, Many countries,number of adults overcome the number of olders.I beleive that it has more advantages than disadvantages

Firstly,If the country has more adults and these works in every field, They provide more new ideas and make new products.Moreover, Their strength of doing hard things is more than the old ones.They take care of everything and they dont have any weaknesess like tha older ones.They also make dicision on their own and learn more lesson's of life.Their crediblity can effect the country in enormious ways.Some of them are they can't say no to anything because of their illness.They also make the envirement clean and green because the new generation is more carefull than the previous one's .They also convert their thinking into processes and gave more results .They also learn many things from others countries developement and do it in their on country,this make their country more advanced.Their point of view on life is also different so they live in their own style.They also know the improtance of population growth,so when they get married they care about this problem.Last but not least,they introduce advance technology by using ai and improved the technology feild.

In conclusion, When the adults of the country overcome the number of olders, this make a positive impact on the country because when the young generation take charge of every field they make changes with the help of their advanced mind and they invent new things to make their public life mor easier.They also helps in economical growth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that a large young-adult population has more advantages, and you offer relevant points such as new ideas, technological development and economic growth. However, the response addresses the comparison only partially: it does not explain the disadvantages of having fewer older people or weigh these against the benefits. Several claims are also unclear or insufficiently supported, for example, “they don’t have any weaknesses like the older ones” and the point about young adults understanding population growth. To strengthen the response, develop two or three relevant advantages with specific explanations or examples, acknowledge at least one disadvantage, and make the comparison explicit so the reader can see why the benefits outweigh the costs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening position, a body paragraph and a conclusion, and the reader can generally identify that you support the situation. However, the body presents many points in one long sequence, so there is little clear progression from one main idea to the next. Repeated use of “They also” and “Moreover” makes the linking mechanical, while references such as “they” and “this” are sometimes unclear. For example, “this make their country more advanced” does not clearly identify which preceding idea “this” refers to. Group related points into separate paragraphs, use topic sentences, and explain links between ideas rather than listing them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “new ideas,” “advanced technology,” “economic growth” and “population growth.” This gives you a basic range for expressing your position, but word choice and spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “olders,” “crediblity,” “enormious,” “envirement” and “developement.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “adults overcome the number of olders” and “their strength of doing hard things.” Aim to use accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “young adults outnumber older people” and “contribute to economic growth” would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including clauses beginning with “because” and “when.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence formation, verb agreement, articles and punctuation, sometimes making the message hard to follow. For example, “this make a positive impact” needs subject–verb agreement, while “They also helps” has the same problem. In “when the young generation take charge,” the verb form does not agree with the subject. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, and capital letters are used inconsistently. Practise building accurate sentences first, then combine related ideas using conjunctions while checking agreement and sentence boundaries.

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