Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

nowdays,In some countries,the number of young people adults is higher then the number of old people.some people is think is a positive development,while other believe creates problem.

The main advantage of having a large young population is economic growth.Young people energetic and ready to learn new skill. They work can for longe hourse and adults esaily to new technology.Therefore,companies can find skilled worker easily produce good.For example,counrties like india with many young people are growing very fast IT and other industries.

ON the other hand,there are some main disadvantages to this situation.if a country has too many young adults the government may not able to provide jobs for everyone. also will be more competition foreducation and housing which makes life more stressful for young people.however,these problem can be solved a good planning and invesment in education and jobs creation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address both sides of the question by identifying economic growth as an advantage and pressure on jobs, education and housing as disadvantages. However, the response does not clearly answer the key question of whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: the opening only says that people hold different views, and the conclusion does not state your own judgement. The ideas are also minimally developed. For instance, you mention India’s growth in IT but do not explain how a large young population contributes to it, while the disadvantages are listed without examples or consequences. The response is 139 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development to fully address the task. State your position clearly and support each main point with explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages and one on disadvantages. The contrast marker “On the other hand” helps signal the shift between the two sides, and “For example” introduces an illustration. However, progression is limited because the ideas within each paragraph are mostly listed rather than linked through explanation. The final sentence says the problems can be solved, but it does not connect this point to a clear overall judgement about which side outweighs the other. Some linking is mechanical, and punctuation and spacing make boundaries between ideas harder to follow. Use clear topic sentences, develop each point in a logical sequence, and add a concluding paragraph that directly answers the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a basic range of relevant vocabulary, including “economic growth,” “skilled worker,” “competition,” and “education and housing,” so the main topic is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “new technology” and “job creation.” However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “longe hourse,” “counrties,” “foreducation,” and “inv esment” (investment). Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “produce good” and “growing very fast IT.” Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for employment, economic development and public services. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and a few longer sentences, including the conditional structure “if a country has too many young adults…” and the clause beginning “which makes life more stressful.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms. However, the range remains limited, and errors in basic sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “some people is think” has an incorrect verb pattern, “Young people energetic” is missing a verb, and “the government may not able” needs “be able.” The sentence “They work can for longe hourse” also has faulty word order. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then extend them with clauses such as “because” and “which.” Check that every sentence has a subject and a correctly formed verb.

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