Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
To begin with the graph illustrated the year between 2003 and 2013 the society in United States of America the eating fast food in restaurants changes in the years.
In the first glance it is clearly seen that the percentage of persons increased day by day. Even so their eating disorder not decreased over the year.
Overall, if we started with every day research it is clearly seen in 2003only 4% persons eat fast food,in 2006 it is 3% and 2013 it is just 2% people ate fast food.With the passage of time in a week community ate 16% in 2003, 20% in 2006 higher range , and again downfall in 2013 just 15.5%. On the contrary, when people started jobs they preferrred more fast food so in a week in 2003 only 30%, but in 2006 34% of community eat the food and then in 2013 only 27%. In once or twice a month in the year of 2003 30%, 2006 only 25% in addition 35% in 2013. A few times of the year in 2003 13%,2006 15% and 2013 also same 15%
In consequently the community who did not ate fast food higher range in 2003 is 5% then lower and become same in 2006 and 2013 only 4%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover the data provided in the chart, but the reporting is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview. While you identify some figures, the analysis is fragmented and fails to highlight the most significant trends or make meaningful comparisons between the categories. For instance, the description of the 'every day' category is confusing, and the interpretation of the data labels (e.g., 'when people started jobs') is inaccurate based on the provided chart. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the main trends in the introduction and group the data logically rather than listing figures chronologically for every category, which makes the report difficult to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In consequently' or 'In the first glance', which do not function correctly as transition signals. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between the years and the categories described. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks flow, resulting in a list-like presentation of data rather than a cohesive summary. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word choice errors that impede clarity, such as 'eating disorder' (which is a medical term, not a description of fast food consumption frequency) and 'community' used in place of 'respondents' or 'people'. The phrasing is often unnatural, and there is a lack of variety in the language used to describe trends (e.g., 'downfall' is used incorrectly to describe a decrease in percentage). To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'community ate', 'did not ate'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. The attempt at complex sentences is limited, and many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation. For example, 'In the first glance it is clearly seen that the percentage of persons increased day by day' is grammatically awkward. Focusing on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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