Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

line graph.

The line graph illustrates the information of admission of five different hospital in a European country between 2004 and 2018.

Overall, the percentage of Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton and Bardley was increase with the year. while, the percentage of oxley was decrease with the year.

Firstly, the percentage of Fortsmith hospital was around 180% in 2004. It increase till 2010 and percentage was around 220%. After that, it decrease for two one year and become about 190% in 2012. Then, it start increasing and the percentage on the end year was 200%. Moreover, the percentage of adlin was around 120% in 2014. After that, it start rapidly increasing with year and become 250% in 2018.

Futhurmore, the percentage of stanton hospital was around 80% in 2004. It was stable at 150% in 2010. After that, it decline for 2 year and then it start increasing again and become 160% in 2018. In addition, the percentage of bardley was 200% in 2004. And it was stable at around 260% in [redacted phone]. After that,decrease and then it start increaseing and become around 260% in 2018. In contrast, the of oxley was around 240% in 2004. And it was decresing with year. And at the end of year 2018 it was around 120%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to address the prompt provided. The instructions ask for a summary of a chart regarding fast food consumption in the USA (2003–2013), but the student describes a line graph about hospital admissions in a European country (2004–2018). While the student attempts to report main features and trends, the content is entirely irrelevant to the task set. Because the response is based on a completely different data set than the one provided in the prompt, it cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'In contrast'. However, the logical progression is hindered by the fact that the data being described does not match the prompt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical use of transition words does not compensate for the lack of relevance to the actual task. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is repetitive and lacks sophisticated flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'start'. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'Futhurmore', 'decresing', 'increaseing') and issues with word choice, such as 'admission of five different hospital' (should be plural 'hospitals'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey complex trends or precise data descriptions effectively. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the presence of errors restrict the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'percentage... was increase', 'it start increasing', 'the of oxley'). There is a lack of control over complex sentence structures, and the writing is dominated by simple, often error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing articles and incorrect capitalization. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's ability to follow the intended meaning, placing the response firmly in the lower band range.

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