Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart displays how much people in the USA eat junk food in restaurants from 2003 to 2013.

Overall, we see in USA slightly less prpole eat fast food, but there are also some persons who eat junk food once a week and twice a month.

As we see, less than five percent of people are eat fast food, and also those who do not eat fast food are almost less than five percent in year 2003,2006 and 2013. In 2006 and 2003, more than 30 percent of people ate junk food in restaurants once a week; slightly less than 30 percent did in 2013.

In USA, about 25 to 30 percent people are eat fast food once a week or twice a month. But there were only fifteen percent of people ate junk food in the years 2006 and 2013, more than 10 pesent eat in 2003. They did not ate fast food continues

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to accurately report the main features. The description of the data is often confusing or factually incorrect based on the provided chart (e.g., stating 'less than five percent' for categories that clearly show higher percentages). The overview is weak and does not provide a clear summary of the trends. Key comparisons are missing or poorly articulated, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual information presented in the chart. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest points and describing the trends (increase/decrease) more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'As we see' and 'In USA'. The referencing is often unclear, making it hard to follow which data point the writer is referring to. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'eat' and 'junk food', and the phrasing is often unnatural or inaccurate (e.g., 'persons who eat junk food'). There are also spelling errors such as 'prpole' and 'pesent'. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision. To improve, learn topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'consumption', 'proportion', 'fluctuate', and 'significant', and practice using these in the context of describing charts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people are eat', 'they did not ate') and sentence structure. Complex sentence attempts are largely unsuccessful and contain errors that distort the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, specifically the correct use of tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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