Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph depicts the eating pattern of junk food by American residents from 2003 to 2013. Three years are compared such as 2003, 2006 and 2013.
In the year of 2003 people had least interest in fast food if we compare with the rest of provided timelines except every day which was double of other years about 5%. and in never percentage also showed 2003 people were not fond of fast food than other given eras which was 5%.
People who love to consume fried food were 20% in 2003 and almost same in 2003 and 2013.
In the comparesion of one time in a week and up to two time in a month graphs almost similar but 2013 ratio of people was increased in twice in month about 33 % which was 27% in once a week bar.
There is equal ratio of 15%, of 2006 and 2006 who ate few time in a year graph while 2003 is lesser than other two.
In conclusion, I noticed in 2003 junk food was more poplar than other years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the trends is often confusing and mathematically incorrect (e.g., stating that 20% was 'almost same in 2003 and 2013' when the chart shows significant variation). The overview is weak and does not effectively highlight the main features or significant differences between the years. Several data points are misread or poorly explained, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual trends presented in the graph. To improve, focus on identifying the most prominent changes and grouping data logically rather than listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the awkward phrasing 'In the comparesion of'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points are being compared. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main findings. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'junk food', 'graphs', and 'bar'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'eating pattern of junk food' and 'few time in a year'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends, which limits the ability to convey information accurately. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a significant proportion', and 'a downward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In the year of 2003 people had least interest...'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in complex constructions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.
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