Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart complete the separation of six parts frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA ([redacted phone].
Overall, The illustration of the proportion of frequency have junk food once a week and once or twice a month. However the least are every day and never had fast food .
In 2006 and 2013, 33% of the proportion of people frequently having the fast food restaurants, nevertheless in 2003 there are 31% enjoyed the fast food in restaurants once a week. And in the same year there are 2 % different in the between once a week and once or twice a month. In the several times a week 20% ,18%,16% and in a few times a year 2006 ,2013 are equally enjoyable eating fast food restaurants among people in the USA.
The least of proportion people of enjoying having fast food in restaurants are every day and never is less than
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The description of the data is fragmented and confusing, with significant inaccuracies in reporting the figures (e.g., mentioning '2013-2013' and failing to clearly distinguish between the years). The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. To improve, you must ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed from the chart and that you provide a coherent summary of the trends rather than just listing isolated numbers. The response lacks a clear analytical focus, making it difficult for the reader to understand the overall patterns in fast food consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'nevertheless in 2003 there are 31%'. The referencing is unclear, and the lack of a complete final sentence disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and linking your ideas with appropriate transition words like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'consequently' to guide the reader through your analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'complete the separation of six parts' and 'equally enjoyable eating' do not accurately describe the data or the context of the chart. There is a reliance on basic, repetitive language, and some word choices are inappropriate for an academic report. To reach a higher band, you should learn to use more precise terminology for describing charts, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will also help you convey the data more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the pie chart complete'), incorrect preposition usage, and sentence fragments. The structure is largely simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or unclear. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Reviewing the use of articles and prepositions will also significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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