Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Overall, the given bar chart information are changes in the year different 2003,2006 and 2013. The higher amount of eating fast food in both years 2006 is for once a week and 2013 is for once or twice in a month by 33% and the lowest term eating fast food in restaurants also in the year of 2013 and 2006 similar.
In 2003 , every day eating fast food in restaurants is the high rate compare to 2006 and 2013. In 2006 is the top rank by the 20% and 33% of eating fast in USA for several times a week and once a week. In 2003 is the lowest rate for consume fast food for a few times a year by 13% and both 2006 and 2013 are same. The bar charts shows in every years at the first increasing the eating fast and then decreasing at last.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the descriptions of the data are often confusing or factually unclear (e.g., 'the lowest term eating fast food... also in the year of 2013 and 2006 similar'). The comparison between years is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, you must clearly identify the most significant trends—such as the shift in frequency over the decade—and support these with accurate data points rather than listing percentages in a way that lacks logical connection.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal logic is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'In 2006 is the top rank'. The progression of ideas is not smooth, and the referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader to guess which data point refers to which category. To reach a higher band, focus on using linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'eating fast food' are used repeatedly, and there is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or descriptive language. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'lowest term' or 'top rank'. To improve, try to use synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'consumption', 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of collocations will help you express the data more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('information are changes'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures ('The bar charts shows in every years'). The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that lack complexity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Additionally, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, while ensuring that your punctuation is accurate.
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