Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

so this graph compares the habit of eating fast from from resturants, people in the united states of america loves to east fast food frequently in the past decade

so, according to this information of 2003, 2006 and 2013. least amout of people like to eat fast food daily in the decade, are there are also some people in this decade who dost like to east fast food they usually dont like this kind of food due to different reasons, but more peoples likely more than everyday and the other likes to east this kind of food sevral times a week in the decade. And then there is peoples which likes to east this food once a week majority of the people like this once a week becasue it is much heakther then eating it twice a week. and then anthother lager number of peoples who likes to eat a few times a year or once or twice a month

ito sumup thos information i would say that majorty of the people likes to east fast food once in a week and twice in a month

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. It does not provide a clear overview of the data, nor does it accurately report the specific figures or trends shown in the chart. The description is vague, using phrases like 'least amount of people' and 'another larger number' without referencing the actual percentages or data points. Furthermore, the response includes subjective commentary (e.g., 'because it is much healthier'), which is not appropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, you must focus on identifying the key trends, comparing the categories (e.g., 'once a week' vs 'daily'), and using the data provided to support your observations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and clear paragraphing. The ideas are presented in a stream-of-consciousness style, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices; the text relies heavily on 'and' and 'so' to link ideas, which creates a repetitive and mechanical flow. The introduction is informal and does not clearly state what the graph represents. To improve, you should structure your report with a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for specific data comparisons, using a wider range of linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently.'

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'resturants,' 'east' (instead of eat), 'amout,' 'heakther,' and 'majorty.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data accurately; for example, using 'likes to eat' repeatedly instead of varying the language to describe frequency or habits. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'a significant proportion,' or 'the majority of respondents.' Focus on accurate spelling and using more precise terminology related to data analysis.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people... loves,' 'peoples which likes'), sentence structure (run-on sentences), and punctuation. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, making the meaning unclear. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentence patterns used are often inaccurate. To improve, you must focus on the basics of English grammar, specifically subject-verb agreement, proper sentence boundaries, and consistent verb tense usage. Practicing the construction of simple, error-free sentences before attempting complex structures would be beneficial.

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