Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph depicts frequency of consuming fast food in restaurants among individuals in the United State between 2003 and 2013. The data is calibrated in percentage.

Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that, the maximum ratio of people ate fast food once a week. However, least percentage of people preferred fast food every day.

To commence with, around 4% people from the USA liked to eat more junk food every day in 2003 as compared to 2006 and 2013 was 3%. Moreover, individuals preferred fast food several times a week accounted as 17% in 2003, then the percentum increased to 20% in the next three year and later stucked at 16% in 2013 .In addition, the large ratio of people consumed fast food once a week represented as 31% which grow to 33% in 2006, therefore it declined to 28% in the year of 2013.

Moving towards, the natives of USA ate fast food once or twice in a week at restaurants reported as 30% and 25% in 2003 and 2006 respectively and the percentage rose gradually in 2013 to 33%. Furthermore, 13% individuals liked to ate junk food a few times a year in 2003, then in the next three years, the percentage increased to 15% and remained stable till 2013. Lastly, 5% people denied to ate fast food in initial year, therefore the percentum remained platue to 4% in both years 2006 and 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response provides a clear overview of the main trends and successfully selects key data points to support the summary. You have covered all categories of the chart and made relevant comparisons between the years. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, stating that 31% grew to 33% and then declined to 28% is accurate, but the phrasing is occasionally repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant shifts more concisely and avoid listing every single data point, which can make the report feel like a catalogue rather than a summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'Moving towards' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, and the use of 'therefore' is occasionally misused (e.g., 'therefore it declined to 28%'). Improving the flow between sentences by using more varied referencing and avoiding repetitive sentence structures would enhance the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'calibrated', 'ratio', and 'percentage'. However, there are several instances of non-standard word choices or awkward phrasing, such as 'percentum', 'stucked', and 'remained platue'. These errors occasionally draw attention to themselves. To improve, focus on using standard academic terminology and ensure that word forms (e.g., 'plateaued' instead of 'remained platue') are used correctly. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also help improve the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and forms, such as 'liked to ate' (should be 'liked to eat') and 'denied to ate'. Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'in the United State'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on consistent tense usage and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will significantly improve your accuracy.

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