Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrate the trend of eating meal from restaurants in the unites states in multiple years of a decade. overall most if the individual love the visit the restaurants one or twice a month while is a significant less individual who dine out everyday. on y-axis the percentage of people is give while on x-axis the multiple times of years are given, lines are presenting the year 2003,2006 and 2013 respectively.
in 2003 there were only 4% of the individuals visiting everyday ,17% were going several times the week,30% were visiting once in a month which is considerably a high ratio percentage declined sharply to the individuals who never like to dine out.
in 2006 there were about 20% of the community loves to go out to enjoy their meal how ever this trend jumped to the 34%while this start tumble to the individual who never visited.
by the passing a decade it comes to the 2013 the number of individuals who went several time a week only 17%.it significantly raised and set to the 33% to the individuals who visited once or twice a month. the individuals who went to the restaurant once or twice a month cover highest percentage of the community however those who never went were laying at the lowest percentage in respective year of the decade.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a summary of the main features, but the analysis is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the description of the data is often confusing. For instance, the statement 'percentage declined sharply to the individuals who never like to dine out' is unclear and does not accurately reflect the chart. Furthermore, the data points mentioned (e.g., '34%') are not clearly linked to the specific categories or years, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, ensure you clearly state which category corresponds to which percentage and avoid vague descriptions of trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is cluttered with information that should be in the body paragraphs, and the transition between years is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'by the passing a decade it comes to the 2013'. The referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult to track which group is being discussed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'loves to go out' or 'set to the 33%'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'significant less individual' instead of 'significantly fewer individuals' and 'multiple times of years' instead of 'various years'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of errors in word formation prevent a higher score. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adverbs related to data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked') would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The bar graph illustrate'), missing articles ('on y-axis'), and incorrect sentence structure ('the percentage of people is give'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after commas. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for small errors like missing articles and prepositions.
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