Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This bar chart illustrate the people in USA how much ate fast food between 2003 to 2013.In this chart describe which years the people ate fast food more or which year is less. Overall , the month of the 2013 people ate fastfood more.

First hand, the chart give information about everyday between 2003 to 2013. In USA 2003 the fast food were eaten more than other two . The percentage of 2003 was around about 4 percent but other had 3 percent. Further , the fast food were eaten in every several time a week of given year. In 2006 the fast food ate percent rose than other. Moreover, once a week of every years was rose the fast food ate percent in 2006 . Therefore, the chart show fast food percentage of every month or twice a moth in given three year. The highest percentage in 2013 the people were eaten most fast food. On the other hand, thw 2006 or 20013 percentage was same and the 2003 percent was lower than both. At the last, the fast people perctage who never eat fast food whole year its actual lower than other percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by describing the chart, but it fails to clearly identify and report the main features. The information provided is often confusing and inaccurate; for example, the claim that 'the month of the 2013 people ate fastfood more' is unclear, and the data comparisons are frequently muddled. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to accurately represent the trends shown in the graph. Many of the descriptions of the data points are vague or incorrect, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual information presented in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs do not flow logically. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as 'First hand' and 'At the last', which do not function as appropriate transitions. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of the argument. The lack of clear paragraphing and the disjointed nature of the sentences significantly hinder the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic words and struggles to use them in the correct context, such as 'fast food were eaten' or 'the fast food ate percent'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that make the text difficult to read. The student does not demonstrate the ability to use a range of vocabulary appropriate for an academic task, and the errors in word formation are persistent throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This bar chart illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented or poorly constructed. There is little evidence of complex sentence structures, and the errors are so frequent that they cause significant difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent, further detracting from the clarity of the writing.

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