Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
According to this chart from 2003 to 2013 a lots of people eating fast food by their frequency of fast food restaurants among people in USA .The chart shows that in 2003 1 to 4 percent people eat fast food every day or never and after that in 2006 this percentage are decreasing abundantly in 2013 the percentage are same as in 2006. after that we can see that the percentage of people who eat fast food in several times a weak is very high. In 2003 up to 15% people eating fast food in several times in weak. In 2006 there are up to 30% people eat fast food in the USA but as compared to 2006 the average of people in 2013 are using less food in USA. But people eat more in once a week and once a month their percentages are same from 2003 to 2013 but these percentages are high as compaerd to all days.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart regarding fast food consumption in the USA from 2003 to 2013. However, the data points and trends are frequently imprecise or inaccurately reported. For instance, the writer states that in 2003 '1 to 4 percent people eat fast food every day or never', whereas the chart categories should be interpreted and compared with care, and phrases like 'several times a weak' and 'up to 30%' reflect a limited ability to accurately select and report key trends. While the overview outlines some general changes, comparisons are underdeveloped and lack clarity, corresponding to the Band 5 descriptors where the task is addressed only partially and key features lack precise coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text which significantly hinders overall progression. Cohesive devices are used repetitively or inappropriately, particularly connective phrases like 'after that' and 'But', which appear multiple times and fail to establish logical links between ideas. Referencing is also confusing at times, such as the unclear shift between various frequency categories ('once a week and once a month their percentages are same'). Although there is a discernible attempt to move from one category to another, the lack of paragraph structure and faulty cohesion place this response firmly at Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is basic and repetitive throughout the text. The writer relies heavily on simple terms like 'people', 'eat', 'percent', and 'food'. There are noticeable word choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'lots of people eating fast food by their frequency', 'using less food', and the spelling error 'weak' instead of 'week'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are generally unsuccessful or inaccurate. While the language used is sufficient to convey a very basic gist of the chart, the frequent lexical inaccuracies and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('this percentage are decreasing', 'the average of people... are using'), incorrect prepositions, and missing auxiliary verbs. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences lacking proper terminal punctuation. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, the grammatical control aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.
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