Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the assigned bar graph delineates information regarding that the frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA ( 2003 - 2013 ). data has been calibrated percentage.
overall, It is evident that the higest percentage show in once a week and once a twice in this time percentage is very highest. every day and another time is very decline percentage.
In, the firstely people eating fast food resturants in every day decrease in 5%. several times a week eating fast food 20%. In once a week USA people eating fast food in USA people is very increase in point of incresae in 30% and decrease in 35%.
In, 2003 once a twice is increasing in 30% in eating fast food. In 2006 people eating fast food 25%. 2013 people eating fast food increase in 30%. a few times a year in 2003 eating fast food in decrease in 15%. 2006 eatin in 15% as 2013 eating in same percentage. last is never 2003 eating in 5% and 2006 and 2013 is appropximatly same decrease in 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart regarding fast food consumption in the USA from 2003 to 2013. However, Task Achievement is significantly hindered by numerous misreadings of the data and a severe lack of clarity in reporting the figures. For instance, the student states that every day consumption decreased by 5%, whereas the chart shows it went from 4% down to 3%. Furthermore, the description of trends is disjointed, and the numbers provided frequently conflict with the actual visual data. While an overview is attempted, it is poorly expressed ('the higest percentage show in once a week and once a twice in this time percentage is very highest'). Consequently, the response only partially addresses the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is weak, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. The student attempts to use paragraphing, but the divisions are illogical and sentences within paragraphs lack clear internal cohesion. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or repetitive (such as the constant repetition of 'In,'). Referencing is also problematic, as pronouns and transition phrases do not clearly link back to previous ideas or data points. Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner, which severely impedes the reader's ability to interpret the intended comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical resource is very limited and basic. The vocabulary used to describe trends and percentages is repetitive and often unnatural (e.g., 'very decline percentage', 'point of incresae'). There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors throughout the response, such as 'once a twice' instead of 'once or twice a month'. The student attempts to use some less common items like 'delineates', but these are overshadowed by pervasive inaccuracies and misuse of terms. While the vocabulary is just about sufficient to convey the general topic of fast food surveys, the errors frequently strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly formed sentence structures. Attempts at complex sentences result in severe structural errors and fragments (e.g., 'the assigned bar graph delineates information regarding that the frequency...'). There are frequent grammatical errors involving verb tenses, prepositions, word order, and missing subjects or verbs. These errors are pervasive and often distort the meaning of the sentences, causing considerable difficulty for the reader throughout the text.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.