Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrates some information that the citizan of USA continously ate junk food in hotals since 2003 and 2013.

Overall, most people went to resturants in 2006 while in 2013, people prefered to went once or twice in a month. Moreover, just few people were recomended to went every day in 2003.

First of all, about 33% people went one in a week or once or twice in a month in 2006 and 2013 while 30 to 32 percent people were went resturents in the same time. Similarly, 285 people went to resturants just once time in a week in 2013 while in 2003 the percentage of people were 32%. People that went to hotels for ate fast food in a few times a year in 2006 and 2003 were same 15% while in the same catagaries people were 13% in 2003.

Secondly, percentage of every day people in the 2006 and 2013 were equal but in 2003 were four percent while people that never went to any hotels in the same years were also equal instead of 2003 and the percentage was very low. Addiontally, 20% people were recomend to went many time in week in 2006 but in 2003 and 2013, 16% and 17% went for enjoying fast sood.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The candidate attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided bar chart regarding fast food consumption in the USA from 2003 to 2013. However, there are significant comprehension issues, misread data points (such as citing '285 people' instead of percentages), and inaccurate reporting of trends. While an overview is attempted, it contains confusing phrasing and inaccurate comparisons. The response addresses the task only partially, leading to a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing statements and poor referencing. Basic cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all' and 'Similarly', but their usage is often mechanical or inaccurate, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion fails at several points, resulting in a band score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and frequently inappropriate. There are numerous non-standard word choices and misspellings, such as 'citizan' instead of citizen, 'hotals' and 'resturants' instead of hotels or restaurants, and 'catagaries' instead of categories. The student struggles with basic terminology related to data representation and frequency, which severely strains the reader and restricts the lexical score to a 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositional usage, such as 'people prefered to went' and 'percentage of people were'. Complex sentence attempts almost universally contain major structural errors. The heavy frequency of grammatical slips impedes communication in several places, corresponding to a band score of 4.0.

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